林木过谦了,你译得很棒,自己博客里写的诗也好.常来啊！试试这个

My father was unavailable, and my mother

looked like she was about to break,

and not into blossom, every time I spoke. 

我父亲不在，我母亲

像要濒临崩溃

而非笑逐颜开，每当我说话

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• 谢谢京燕，感觉这样更贴切。break into blossom -LinMu- ♂ (76 bytes) () 07/02/2014 postreply 14:54:11

• Not into blossom要不就用“而非心花怒放”吧,比我前面选的"笑逐颜开"贴切~~~ -京燕花园- ♀ (157 bytes) () 07/02/2014 postreply 16:26:47

• 谢谢京燕指点，笑纳了（^.^） -LinMu- ♂ (0 bytes) () 07/03/2014 postreply 15:06:14