写得非常好!I like it very much!
我用词conservative,我没见过的不敢用,我觉得你就有点儿太胆大了,哈哈,we need to find a middle ground.
(1) her heart sagged. 我从没听到过sag这样用的,what's wrong with sank?
(2) But as a self-claimed amateur artist with good looks, ->self-acclaimed?
(3)One day, suddenly he didn’t reply her emails any more and he no longer visited the photography forum. 我会直接说: One day, he stopped replying her emails and visiting the photogrphy forum.
(4)two my best pieces I wanna share with you. two of my best pieces
最后情节上,我有点不明白为啥also for the very last time in her whole life? 她没有自杀吧?还是她决定再也不看雪了?