两日不见妹， 熊心皆已碎

wind cracks, waves splash and wheels grind
a listless bear lies there with a blank stare
almost all travelers have got on board
and now the ship is being unanchored

the loving bird has not yet come
though she once promised the voyage
the drifting bottle contains no message
the rusting leaves carry no word

will the bear survive the heartbreak
if the voyage is only a dream?

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• 看来真是心碎了，商赖也不会写了。少了一节 -忘侠- ♂ (99 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 15:07:07

• 侠客， 少了一节是爱没了。我本不想压韵，既然侠客请求， 我就加点韵吧 -bearsback- ♂ (433 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 18:48:27

• 改得很漂亮。俩个版本同样喜欢。 -忘侠- ♂ (38 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 19:03:26

• 一曲英雄传奇 起伏无怨意; 再回首泪如雨 分隔天与地 -忘侠- ♂ (352 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 15:17:30

• what is hawl-bear? -laughs- ♂ (0 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 16:01:22

• hawk. thanks. or "eagle-bear" -忘侠- ♂ (0 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 16:05:41

• 问好，忘侠。你的网名让我想起了23731241说过的：“放下才能快乐”。 -婉蕠- ♀ (0 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 16:39:36

• 说得好。谢谢婉蕠。 -忘侠- ♂ (90 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 16:57:20

• 回复：说得好。谢谢婉蕠。 -婉蕠- ♀ (43 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:09:08

• 不会吧？ -我爱阿美- ♂ (60 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:12:07

• Really? -婉蕠- ♀ (23 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:15:12

• 回复：Really? -我爱阿美- ♂ (60 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:20:53

• Got it. Thank you. Have a nice weekend. -婉蕠- ♀ (0 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:25:04

• you are smart. ha -忘侠- ♂ (0 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:27:53

• you are right too. -忘侠- ♂ (66 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:15:51

• 回复：不会吧？ -EnLearner- ♀ (67 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:21:33

• true, -忘侠- ♂ (15 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:25:05

• yeah, -忘侠- ♂ (85 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:13:33

• 回复：yeah, -婉蕠- ♀ (18 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:16:09

• it's a good question for me to ask bearsback. -忘侠- ♂ (54 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:18:18

• 回复：回复：说得好。谢谢婉蕠。 -蒙蒙雾- ♀ (17 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:21:33

• my dear e-master. secret, secret... -忘侠- ♂ (25 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:22:53

• 回复：my dear e-master. secret, secret... -蒙蒙雾- ♀ (21 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:28:35

• 回复：回复：回复：说得好。谢谢婉蕠。 -婉蕠- ♀ (82 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:24:22

• hahaha, i like you.. -忘侠- ♂ (80 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:27:16

• Thank you. Have a nice Sunday. -婉蕠- ♀ (0 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 17:37:49

• 好诗。 流利通顺。 -bearsback- ♂ (56 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 18:11:24

• 飞向东方 -忘侠- ♂ (92 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 18:30:28

• 侠客，难道鹰妹她是追赶 -bearsback- ♂ (86 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 18:52:48

• 那我赶紧发sos告诉你鹰妹。让她立马落地，听你的发落：） -忘侠- ♂ (0 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 19:08:56

• 谢谢侠客。 -bearsback- ♂ (16 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 19:11:02

• 这句怎么改好？ -忘侠- ♂ (164 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 18:34:33

• may be -bearsback- ♂ (131 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 19:09:48

• 你说的对。 -忘侠- ♂ (70 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 19:13:24

• 再送一首离别诗，后会有期 -忘侠- ♂ (259 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 18:47:45

• 断背曲？ -蒙蒙雾- ♀ (0 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 18:51:32

• 俩 -忘侠- ♂ (90 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 19:00:02

• 侠客， 中英都是上乘功夫 -bearsback- ♂ (86 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 18:57:31

• 你厉害。 你能看穿我的脑子 -忘侠- ♂ (66 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 19:06:27

• 侠客， 请为我告诉鹰妹 -bearsback- ♂ (14 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 19:12:53

• okok, so long... -忘侠- ♂ (0 bytes) () 05/09/2010 postreply 19:18:17

• 请告诉鹰妹 -bearsback- ♂ (123 bytes) () 05/10/2010 postreply 14:54:09

• your鹰妹说： -忘侠- ♂ (86 bytes) () 05/10/2010 postreply 15:10:57

• 你鹰说； -忘侠- ♂ (100 bytes) () 05/10/2010 postreply 15:18:39

• oh no... -bearsback- ♂ (74 bytes) () 05/10/2010 postreply 16:41:13

• hahahahahhahahahahaha -bearsback- ♂ (103 bytes) () 05/10/2010 postreply 16:31:55

• think of 读英文小说, -忘侠- ♂ (322 bytes) () 05/10/2010 postreply 16:21:25

• 侠客 -bearsback- ♂ (282 bytes) () 05/10/2010 postreply 16:53:49

• 你就别谦虚了。 -忘侠- ♂ (131 bytes) () 05/10/2010 postreply 18:35:13

• that was the truth -bearsback- ♂ (80 bytes) () 05/10/2010 postreply 19:40:45

• rustling -bearsback- ♂ (11 bytes) () 05/10/2010 postreply 14:46:08

• and -忘侠- ♂ (379 bytes) () 05/10/2010 postreply 16:05:16

• I like thinking big &acting small.. -忘侠- ♂ (0 bytes) () 05/10/2010 postreply 16:16:39

• i agree with you -bearsback- ♂ (310 bytes) () 05/10/2010 postreply 16:44:43

• oh, i got u. yesterday -忘侠- ♂ (193 bytes) () 05/10/2010 postreply 15:25:29

• haha -bearsback- ♂ (190 bytes) () 05/10/2010 postreply 16:30:23