【批批改改】The intern whom I mentioned last time…

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The intern whom I mentioned last time with excellent communication skills had been in US army for three years.

He told me last Sunday after he solved another case perfectly. I wondered his experience before he was admitted in the residency program. And he told me the details. He said for the first sixth months in military traning, it was very tough. For a whole 连队(英文怎么说?I forgot now), if only one person made a mistake,than the whole 连队 would do the training again, including wearing suits, running, etc. Sometimes, over one night, they had this traning several times.

So, the training in US army is very tough. The intern got promotion in the army. 

It is not surprising that he could solve some tough scenarios smoothly as an medical intern. He had excellent review in recent interns evaluation meeting by all of attendings who worked with him.  
 

(我随便写一写,为了练习英文写作,欢迎批改指正!)

 

Ibelieu大师修改的文章:(吉祥雨用红笔标出作为对照)

Exemplar of native or native like English:

It turns out that intern with excellent communication skills, whom I mentioned in a previous post of mine, had been in the US Army for three years.  Last Sunday after he had solved another thorny case perfectly he told me this when I inquired about his pior experience before being admitted into the residency program.  He let me in on some very interesting details.  He said the first sixth months of military training were the toughest.  Even if just one of them messed up,the whole company would have to repeat whatever training routine they were going throughbe it suiting up,running,and what not.  Sometimes,they had to pull an all-nighter until everyone passed muster. 

So it seems that training in the US Army is very tough.  The intern did very well and got promotion in the Army. 

Given this background, it's no surprise that he can function competently in tough scenarios as a medical intern.  At a  recent intern evaluation meeting, he received excellent reviews from all the attendees who had worked with him.  

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欢迎大家批改。Johnie呢?:) -妖妖灵- 给 妖妖灵 发送悄悄话 妖妖灵 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 02/25/2022 postreply 17:34:20

仅供参考: -ibelieu- 给 ibelieu 发送悄悄话 ibelieu 的博客首页 (1177 bytes) () 02/25/2022 postreply 18:29:46

哇塞!!!写得太好太好啦!大师,万分感谢!!这样太有助于英文写作提高啦!美坛可以玩【批批改改】节目!:) -妖妖灵- 给 妖妖灵 发送悄悄话 妖妖灵 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 02/25/2022 postreply 18:35:23

原文挺好,我只是就着原文稍加整理而已。 -ibelieu- 给 ibelieu 发送悄悄话 ibelieu 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 02/25/2022 postreply 18:40:19

获益匪浅。美坛别的节目是主持人当老师,这个批批改改是主持人当学生。希望能玩起来:) -妖妖灵- 给 妖妖灵 发送悄悄话 妖妖灵 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 02/25/2022 postreply 19:06:37

@@信大师把我写的英文给批改了一下,天,改完之后是出版水平!欢迎大家来玩这个游戏!像Johnie说的,好英文是改出来的! -妖妖灵- 给 妖妖灵 发送悄悄话 妖妖灵 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 02/25/2022 postreply 18:39:00

a nice writing though, bravo to yoyo:) -忒忒绿- 给 忒忒绿 发送悄悄话 忒忒绿 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 02/26/2022 postreply 08:13:00

谢谢绿诗人,喜欢看到大家改一改,非常有帮助:) -妖妖灵- 给 妖妖灵 发送悄悄话 妖妖灵 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 02/26/2022 postreply 09:23:34

谢谢110抛玉引玉,把自己架在火上烤,作为非英语专业人士,写得很不错,“我信你”改得妙,当属exemplary,现对比 -吉祥雨- 给 吉祥雨 发送悄悄话 吉祥雨 的博客首页 (11352 bytes) () 02/26/2022 postreply 08:35:38

谢谢吉祥雨花时间把原文和修改文对比总结出来!我会把它稍后放在原文中,在你的总结之上,我用蓝笔接着补一些漏和写写心得: -妖妖灵- 给 妖妖灵 发送悄悄话 妖妖灵 的博客首页 (14450 bytes) () 02/26/2022 postreply 09:15:35

也欢迎你参加每周五的一句话翻译,写作业的过程学了很多,而且Idiom对表达地道英语帮助太大了:) -妖妖灵- 给 妖妖灵 发送悄悄话 妖妖灵 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 02/26/2022 postreply 09:19:28

恭喜妖妖。首页进来,谢谢网管,批批改改The intern whom I mentioned last time推荐成功 -梅雨潭- 给 梅雨潭 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 02/26/2022 postreply 10:11:09

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