Hope this will clarify

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回答: 有点那个... 由 聚曦亭 于 2013-07-21 09:19:01

A man knows a wine only at (the moment of )tipsy; 
A flower becomes a true beauty only at (the moment of) half-blooming.


The rule of thumb is if you remove some words and the removal does not affects people's understanding and the lustre of the writing, then the removed words are unnecessary.

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• And it will improve your version if you change "a man" into "one -聚曦亭- ♀ 给 聚曦亭 发送悄悄话 (68 bytes) () 07/21/2013 postreply 10:18:15

• Some words got cut off. So here is the complete comment: -聚曦亭- ♀ 给 聚曦亭 发送悄悄话 (198 bytes) () 07/21/2013 postreply 10:21:30

• I really don't see the difference. -hammerheadshark- ♀ 给 hammerheadshark 发送悄悄话 (220 bytes) () 07/21/2013 postreply 10:28:55

• Yes, it would be a big improvement! -聚曦亭- ♀ 给 聚曦亭 发送悄悄话 (711 bytes) () 07/21/2013 postreply 10:43:52

• I thought you'd go there -hammerheadshark- ♀ 给 hammerheadshark 发送悄悄话 (245 bytes) () 07/21/2013 postreply 13:31:36

• No, it doesn't. -SanGabriel- ♀ 给 SanGabriel 发送悄悄话 (642 bytes) () 07/21/2013 postreply 10:23:39

• As I said -hammerheadshark- ♀ 给 hammerheadshark 发送悄悄话 (220 bytes) () 07/21/2013 postreply 10:33:53

• But you didn't answer my questions. Replicated below: -SanGabriel- ♀ 给 SanGabriel 发送悄悄话 (361 bytes) () 07/21/2013 postreply 10:46:14

• Ok, -hammerheadshark- ♀ 给 hammerheadshark 发送悄悄话 (677 bytes) () 07/21/2013 postreply 13:24:51

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