【长相思】 清明祭母及英译

冰也寒， 雪也寒。 少小离家千万言， 儿郎有暖衫。	Thent the ice was cold, And the snow was cold. Still I remember Mom's words I was told, And a warm coat given to hold.
风一天， 雨一天， 冬去春来又一年， 梦中忆母颜。	After the windy days, And the rainy days, Now the spring has come with bright rays, And in my dream is my Mom's face.

英译第2版(AABB韵）：

Then the ice was quite chilling,

And the snow was freezing.

I remember Mom's words as I was told,

And a warm coat given to hold.

After the days when the wind blew,

And the days the rain flew,

Now spring has come with bright rays；

And to my dream my Mom's face.

（湘西山民于2012年清明前夕）

 

词牌例词：

白居易《长相思（汴水流）》

中中平，〖中中平〗。

汴水流，泗水流。

中仄平平中仄平，中平中仄平。

流到瓜州古渡头，吴山点点愁。

中中平，〖中中平〗。

思悠悠，恨悠悠。

中仄平平中仄平，中平中仄平。

恨到归时方始休，月明人倚楼。

所有跟帖： 

• touching poem. -billnet- ♂ (0 bytes) () 04/03/2012 postreply 10:25:49

• 简朴的语言表达了最深的思念 -sportwoman- ♀ (404 bytes) () 04/03/2012 postreply 10:59:55

• 谢两位。英文翻译再改一下（一节通韵） -湘西山民- ♂ (1249 bytes) () 04/03/2012 postreply 13:50:21

• 添个乐： 儿郎有暖衫-》儿郎着暖衫 -billnet- ♂ (0 bytes) () 04/03/2012 postreply 14:07:43

• “着”也挺好。 -湘西山民- ♂ (69 bytes) () 04/03/2012 postreply 14:12:03

• 我更喜欢你的“英译第2版(AABB韵）” -sportwoman- ♀ (0 bytes) () 04/03/2012 postreply 19:55:18

• 希望看到您更多作品，我跟定您。哈哈哈！ -sportwoman- ♀ (0 bytes) () 04/03/2012 postreply 20:02:14

• 真挚感人的诗作,让我想起了阿穆隆演唱的[思念母亲]： -斓婷- ♀ (3931 bytes) () 04/04/2012 postreply 19:03:43

• 谢谢！ 阿穆隆演唱的[思念母亲]让人感动！ -湘西山民- ♂ (0 bytes) () 04/05/2012 postreply 08:36:42