great piece of writing! My suggestions...

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I stopped envying what I do not have, but feel grateful with what I do have.--> I stopped envying what I do not have, but felt grateful with what I do have.?

 

Upon reading Carpediem’s essay on his marriage taking away his loneliness, --> Upon reading Carpediem’s essay on how his marriage taking away his loneliness?  


I thought I could write something down about --> I thought I could also write something down about?

what my marriage has brought me --> what my own merriage has brought to me?

I no longer mouthing along Annie Lennox’s --> I no longer mouth along Annie Lennox’s (however, not sure on the usage of "mouth along")

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• Thanks a lot! see my response. -非文学青年- ♀ 给 非文学青年 发送悄悄话 非文学青年 的博客首页 (2289 bytes) () 08/07/2011 postreply 17:12:50

• The first one is changed to this: -非文学青年- ♀ 给 非文学青年 发送悄悄话 非文学青年 的博客首页 (267 bytes) () 08/07/2011 postreply 17:22:03

• another one... -同学小薇- ♀ 给 同学小薇 发送悄悄话 (287 bytes) () 08/07/2011 postreply 18:58:54

• Good catch! Thanks! -非文学青年- ♀ 给 非文学青年 发送悄悄话 非文学青年 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 08/08/2011 postreply 00:39:37

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