I stopped envying what I do not have, but feel grateful with what I do have.--> I stopped envying what I do not have, but felt grateful with what I do have.?
Good catch! thanks!
Upon reading Carpediem’s essay on his marriage taking away his loneliness, --> Upon reading Carpediem’s essay on how his marriage taking away his loneliness?
Bingo! I thought about adding it while writing. This one reminds me of what I wrote for my first toastmaster visit. Remember I had something "about how my mentor doesn't feel nervous any more", you or cutestream said maybe get rid of "how".
I thought I could write something down about --> I thought I could also write something down about?
Not sure about if it is "also" here, since I am writing something different from Carpediem's.
what my marriage has brought me --> what my own merriage has brought to me?
This "to" is optional, as you can say, he brought me two apples, and also: he brought two apples to me.
I no longer mouthing along Annie Lennox’s --> I no longer mouth along Annie Lennox’s (however, not sure on the usage of "mouth along")
Good catch!
I saw this expression "mouth along" recently in A Free Life.
