只匆匆扫了一眼，晚上细读。

同意你的这个建议：

The world puts off its mask of vastness to its lover.
It becomes small as one song, as one kiss of the eternal.

面对爱人，宇宙撤下了无边的面具。
它变小了，如一支歌，一个永恒的吻。

楼主的和你的comments都好看，要好好和你们学习。