谢谢灰衣人和self网友的意见,修改一下。

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回答: 老兄的精神可嘉,值得大家学习,verdeboy2011-03-24 12:27:01

逸士的原文:

She carried the dirty clothes in a basket and went to the nearest stream. She watched other women how to wash clothes. They soaked the clothes in water and took them up and put on a smooth stone above the water. Then they beat the wet clothes with a wooden stick till the dirt on the clothes was squeezed out with water. Then they dipped the clothes in water again and shook them in water to let the dirt go with the current. After a while they took them up and wrung water out of the clothes.

 

我的改写如下:

She went down to the nearest stream, carrying dirty clothes in a basket, to learn how other women would do their laundry. They would first soak up their washings in the stream, put them up on a smooth stone and beat away at them with a wooden stick to squeeze out the dirt. Then they would pick one piece and shake and turn it in the current to rinse before taking it up and wringing it dry.

修改:

She went down to the nearest stream, carrying dirty clothes in a basket, to learn how other women would do their laundry. They would first soak up their washings in the stream, put them up on a smooth stone and beat away  with a wooden stick to squeeze out the dirt. Then they would pick one piece and shake and turn it in the current to rinse before wringing it dry.

改错并不是丢脸的事,谁也不可能完美。明知有错,却不改正,那才可悲。 

 

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