没命MM, 谢你的表扬!我都脸红了。文中有好几个错误:
1.making me a day: making my day
2.what name it is: what its name is
3.he hadn't got yet: he hadn't given one yet
4. when I tried first a little bit: I first tried....
5. when he dose: when he does
6. please see another direction:please see another shot
希望版主能给帮助该过来。另外,多用形容词是初级写作,高级的写作应该多用并列句,排比句。比如:as bueatiful as..., as well.... and so on.
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对不起,叫错你名了, 应称你明MM, 请原谅!
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