回复：亲爱的波影:能公开你的秘密吗?

来源: 于 2009-08-28 11:08:53 [博客] [旧帖] [给我悄悄话] 本文已被阅读：次

没命MM, 谢你的表扬！我都脸红了。文中有好几个错误：
1.making me a day: making my day
2.what name it is: what its name is
3.he hadn't got yet: he hadn't given one yet
4. when I tried first a little bit: I first tried....
5. when he dose: when he does
6. please see another direction：please see another shot
希望版主能给帮助该过来。另外，多用形容词是初级写作，高级的写作应该多用并列句，排比句。比如：as bueatiful as..., as well.... and so on.