回复：漫兴闲谈 两地书 致德利君 090605

来源: 海外逸士 于 2009-06-11 05:56:15 [] [博客] [旧帖] [给我悄悄话] 阅读数 : (285 bytes)
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one afternoon, not one day afternoon.
out of lake? to where? you meant "out of sight"?
it just give ---- it just gives
sails and moves? one verb is enough.
who wwith delight? boats with delight?
waves scramle water?

這些詩一讀就知道是外行寫的。不合詩道。

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