回复：漫兴闲谈 两地书 致德利君 090605

one afternoon, not one day afternoon.
out of lake? to where? you meant "out of sight"?
it just give ---- it just gives
sails and moves? one verb is enough.
who wwith delight? boats with delight?
waves scramle water?

這些詩一讀就知道是外行寫的。不合詩道。