谢谢声姐的讲评和砖头~~ :D

回答: 俺一定不把 Lilac MM 当外人.NewVoice2011-09-20 09:28:21

Sis Voice, you got that metaphor very well. Here the plain snow equals the plain girl. He finally found the beauty and indispensability in the plain now as well as in her. A photographer may be very good at capturing the physical beauty, but he may easily ignore the inner beauty.

 

Sis is very sensitive and sharp.

Thank you for your bricks. Below is my acknowledge and defense.

Northern city – northern city

>> My mistake, should be lower case

talent in photography – talent at photography

>> googled. “talented in” seems to be more widely used than “talented at”

good at composition and color – good at composition and coloring

>>googled. “composition and color” seems a fixed art term

weight of the snow accumulating on their - weight of the snow accumulated on their

>> should not be passive tense here . E.g “Will snow accumulate on a black bear's back?”

heavy snow deposits on - heavy snow deposited on

>> here deposit is noun, “snow deposits” 枝上的积雪

Amateur artist with good looks - Amateur artist with a good look

>> looks Physical appearance, especially when pleasing

It seems “looks” should be used instead of “look”.

Downright Depressed - Downright depressed

>>My mistake.  should be lowered case

lense – lens

>> My spelling mistake.

 They continued to share what had happened in their lives and exchanged idea

>> I think “exchange” here should be right. It is in parallel with “share”, not “happened”. So can’t use “exchanged

 

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