菜鸟的菜来了

本帖于 2011-06-30 19:19:29 时间, 由版主 林贝卡 编辑

我比菜鸟还菜。下定决心好好练习写作。

我写了一小段,敬请大仙儿们帮我改,改成地道的,准确的,漂亮的表达。谢谢!

liuliu has strong self-esteem

When we took a walk after dinner last night, I asked liuliu why she hit her friend on face in her daycare. She tried to avoid my question and redirected my attention to other things. Obviously, she did not want to touch that topic. I asked her again and she confessed that she was unhappy at that moment.

 

After we got home, she had an accident and asked me to change her wet pants. Grandpa humiliated liuliiu using his fingers to scrape his face, the traditional Chinese way of teasing. Liuliu was irritated immediately and asked yeye to go away. She refused to talk with Yeye again.

 

Her daddy came back from Baltimore after a business trip late last night. I simply mentioned what happened in the past few days to her dad when we had breadfirst together this morning. Liuliu played same trick by asking her dad some other questions to draw away his attention when she was asked not to hit other kids but use words to express her anger by her dad. Apparently, she tried to disguise her nervousness and upsetting, meaning that she knew what she did yesterday was wrong.

 

Clearly, Liuliu has strong self-esteem. It could be a very good thing if she is treated in proper ways. As her mom, I need to be very careful when talk to her, not to hurt her while convey my concerns. It is not easy for both of us.

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写得很好,关注。。。 -金迷- 给 金迷 发送悄悄话 金迷 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 06/22/2011 postreply 10:57:52

I'm busy now, and just read the first 4 lines. your writing is -tern2- 给 tern2 发送悄悄话 tern2 的博客首页 (176 bytes) () 06/22/2011 postreply 10:58:28

回复:菜鸟的菜来了 -i999- 给 i999 发送悄悄话 i999 的博客首页 (97 bytes) () 06/22/2011 postreply 11:08:33

我给老相好拍砖引玉, -非文学青年- 给 非文学青年 发送悄悄话 非文学青年 的博客首页 (3331 bytes) () 06/22/2011 postreply 12:50:10

回复:我给老相好拍砖引玉, -i999- 给 i999 发送悄悄话 i999 的博客首页 (35 bytes) () 06/22/2011 postreply 13:38:47

回复:我给老相好拍砖引玉, -i999- 给 i999 发送悄悄话 i999 的博客首页 (77 bytes) () 06/22/2011 postreply 13:52:17

改了之后还有可以再精改的地方,看能不能引来坛子里的玉,你也慢慢多琢磨琢磨。 -非文学青年- 给 非文学青年 发送悄悄话 非文学青年 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 06/22/2011 postreply 14:10:05

回复:改了之后还有可以再精改的地方,看能不能引来坛子里的玉,你也慢慢多琢磨琢磨。 -i999- 给 i999 发送悄悄话 i999 的博客首页 (85 bytes) () 06/22/2011 postreply 14:11:52

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