Overall,great work!
1. who strive to be good readers,strive没有表达出设法做而且成功的概念。
2. The people who love to read--> Those who love to read
3. With a book in the hand, 我觉得有点怪
4. Without any conscious effort,-->efforts?
5. their imagination, which will greatly benefit them in future.
which clause 跟在imagination后面,指imagination的话不太对。