非常精准呀, 你说的都很好, 没一块废砖,语感很棒, 大谢!

这句话可以当病句教材了. :)

How about I changed it this way:

Angelina Jolie delivered an Oscar-caliber performance, who totally disappeared into her role as a heart-broken but strong willed mom. Although her son got kidnapped, she never gave up her hope and had the guts to take on the whole corrupted LAPD to finally get the truth surfaced.

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• 我还是觉得那个who跟在performance之后不好。 -非文学青年- ♀ (661 bytes) () 07/24/2011 postreply 22:01:03

• 短句好，长的头晕 -selfselfself- ♂ (347 bytes) () 07/24/2011 postreply 22:44:40

• Good rewriting~ -lilac09- ♀ (579 bytes) () 07/25/2011 postreply 07:19:43

• I think yours conveys what I am trying to express. Much better t -lilac09- ♀ (0 bytes) () 07/25/2011 postreply 07:13:29