我还是觉得那个who跟在performance之后不好。

现在觉得弄成一句也行，你看呢？

Delivering an Oscar-caliber performance, Angelina Jolie totally disappeared into her role as a heart-broken but strong-willed mom， who never gave up her hope in rescuing her kidnapped son and had the guts to take on the whole corrupted LAPD to finally get the truth surfaced.

Although her son got kidnapped好像感觉逻辑上没有转折，这里的although有点没必要。

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• 短句好，长的头晕 -selfselfself- ♂ (347 bytes) () 07/24/2011 postreply 22:44:40

• Good rewriting~ -lilac09- ♀ (579 bytes) () 07/25/2011 postreply 07:19:43

• I think yours conveys what I am trying to express. Much better t -lilac09- ♀ (0 bytes) () 07/25/2011 postreply 07:13:29