A very good writing! I am very impressed.

 

There are several sentences that are too long (especially in the last two paragraphs, maybe you need to re-write them a little bit.

- internet -> Internet or the Internet

 - I enjoy and benefit from the online forums the most.

- 老相好 that I met first and then we became my good friends through the Iinternet. (grammar)

- describe my impressions on (of) them ( "of" is better than "on")



- what I enjoy most, what I enjoy the most



- Other than that, some personal - Other than those, some personal



- exiting (exciting) moments of the growth and improvement development of



- with tears and laughters - with tears and laughter



-As the urge and enthusiasm to exchange information with my online mommy fellows (?)  have been are fading away, I started to spending more time in self-improvement. 



- I finally got settled with the idea of improving my English first, and no matter what, to removing the language barriers as much as I can (grammar)



- obsessed by anything -> obsessed with anything



- I have to remind myself to avoid -> I have to remind myself of avoiding



- being stuck on cover letters -> I feel that this is not a good expression, but not sure how to change it



- It is very sad that my English skills had regressed to a stage that I could not finish a sentence without mistakes after having stayed at home without practicing very often for three years -> this sentence is too long and needs to be broken down, especially there are two "without" in the sentence. 









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