学falsetruth：酒后几个半句纪念中青年的毛泽东

Over bump, over hump
Through weed, through thorn
Over ridge, over bridge,
Through wind, through wave
He marched on, he marched on
From Xiang to Kunlun
From Kunlun to Huang He
He marched on, he marched on
With burns, with blisters
Through bullets, through blasts
To save a land
So divided, plundered and trampled
To save a people
So belittled, bullied and battered

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• 改的还真有那么点意思。不过falsetruth现在正缺钱， -fearcpatest- ♀ (191 bytes) () 12/26/2010 postreply 16:46:28

• 是没写完。写到一半就醒酒了。之后就不知怎么写了 -havenot- ♀ (170 bytes) () 12/26/2010 postreply 17:11:10

• 不是指这个。不是说这段历史你没写完整。是语气上， -fearcpatest- ♀ (301 bytes) () 12/26/2010 postreply 17:30:27

• 你说的很对。的确后面没力了。最后两行 -havenot- ♀ (24 bytes) () 12/26/2010 postreply 17:44:07

• 要是最后加一个 -fearcpatest- ♀ (86 bytes) () 12/26/2010 postreply 18:06:46

• march这个词是向你学的。谢谢。你看这个怎样？ -havenot- ♀ (481 bytes) () 12/26/2010 postreply 18:21:09

• 或者 -havenot- ♀ (460 bytes) () 12/26/2010 postreply 18:40:52

• 不错不错。还是觉得这个和第一版都好：） -fearcpatest- ♀ (33 bytes) () 12/26/2010 postreply 19:27:17

• 我们这也下雪了 -havenot- ♀ (4 bytes) () 12/26/2010 postreply 19:44:55

• 噢，看来又认错人了。 -fearcpatest- ♀ (127 bytes) () 12/26/2010 postreply 20:26:20

• 没关系。以前的很多熟人现在都不认识我了 -havenot- ♀ (14 bytes) () 12/26/2010 postreply 20:56:59

• 黑黑， 我可以借给你 -fearcpatest- ♀ (36 bytes) () 12/26/2010 postreply 21:18:34

• 谢谢! 我只需要1000 -havenot- ♀ (61 bytes) () 12/26/2010 postreply 21:51:12

• Thanks for sharing. -美坛奇葩- ♂ (0 bytes) () 12/27/2010 postreply 11:28:35