怎么能写得像首诗呢，我觉得四不像

老师让写一首诗，用到12个划线的词，我觉得我写的根本不是啥诗，是我的词汇太贫乏还是感觉没出来，大家能帮我看看吗？

Spring snow is coming
Slowly but steadily for the overnight
The world turned white with surprise
for this unexpected snow in spring

snowflake knocked my window with quiet drizzling
and left three tears stains through the window
Drifting, drifting, as if rushing for a party
little by little, they unite to a huge cover

In the morning I looked out
Bushes, trees and flowers
All covered with the white sheet
sticks are shaking and flowers are trembling
The world are framed in white mat


everybody is struggling with the snow
Tiptoeing, swirling and almost fell
Like a wolf sneaking to a pig
Somebody is sneezing and sound like
nobody welcome the snow


standing on the snow, I tell myself
the weather is always ruthless and
nothing to be afraid
Many years ago, I came to the world with a
Spring snow but my mother never complained

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• snowtulip，你按照老师的要求把英诗写出来就已经不错了。 -婉蕠- ♀ (54 bytes) () 03/15/2010 postreply 10:28:19

• 那倒是，我也就蒙混高中生的水平 -snowtulip- ♀ (92 bytes) () 03/15/2010 postreply 12:58:02

• 斑竹你别给我置顶啊，我这实在太丢了，写得太臭了 -snowtulip- ♀ (0 bytes) () 03/15/2010 postreply 13:00:09