see this free syle one,

你轻轻地离开，不带走一片云彩。
我抬头望去， 彩云满天。
我知道，当海风抚我的长发，那是你在对我诉说。

wind blows my hair gently
waves beat the shore slowly
Love's gone reluctantly
You're in my mind deeply


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quietly u leave,taking no clouds
i send you a wave and a big smile
the seagulls hover overhead and cry
the rosy bright clouds burn the sky

wind kisses my face,blowing my hat off
waves touch my feet and surge into my heart
your voice is heard faintly from distance
'I AM the sea wind blowing through your hair'

you fade away before my eyes,
I look at the azure, searching that fire
it's gone away but burnt into my head
only the sea wind touches my long hair


the 1st line is sortof from ur poem, right?
hahahaha

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• i am so impressed...it is so well written -bearsback- ♂ (88 bytes) () 02/15/2010 postreply 22:08:20

• i wrote it a couple of days ago. not tonight:) -HuHuYa- ♀ (0 bytes) () 02/15/2010 postreply 22:12:42

• these two lines are so good -bearsback- ♂ (82 bytes) () 02/15/2010 postreply 22:13:35

• this line is also very good -bearsback- ♂ (68 bytes) () 02/15/2010 postreply 22:34:04