我想问问大家的意见,这篇文章该怎么改,另外大家能不能给我点意见我从哪方面着手提高,我自己的英文是啥都差,现在我都不知道该怎么学了。
"Shining house" by Alice Munro explores the conflicts between two different generations. It sounds like changes are not avoidable, including values, lifestyle and the goal and difference are always existing, which I could not agree more, but I can't agree with the way young generation treat elderly generation.
Two generations are different; in fact, it is a striking contrast between them. Mrs. Fullerton, who is presenting the elderly generation, is somehow odd for her young neighbors. Living in an unpainted old house, breeding hens and goat, never contact the young neighbors except for her egg business. She reminds to be mysterious. Mrs. Fullerton, who was abandoned by her second hu*****and, is living lonely with her hens and nanny goat and sells eggs to neighbors. She is not sad or alone, in contrast, she is "self-sufficient and lasting." When she shows up in front of her neighbors for business, she is a well dressed lady, with her hair curled and her mouth painted. Inside, she is an individual and strong woman. However, the young neighbors are living in a totally different life. They are middle-aged, decent white-collars such as realtor or lawyer. In fact, they are not rich but they always dream of being rich. As you know, sometime people are living in a kind of illusion, just for comfort themselves. Even though they can’t get that much wealth, they are still seeking for the feeling of luxury.
The shining house, with beautiful bathroom and nice kitchen with birch cupboard, really feed the false satisfaction of luxury. As the author said, the shining house were “for the people like Mary and her hu*****and,” “with not much money but expectations of more.” However, “they are good people,” they help each other and they really want to build a community they want, so Mrs. Fullerton’s house must gone. Here the key conflict comes. Mrs. Fullerton is a history and she doesn’t fit here now. It is really ridiculous to keep an old, ugly house and annoy hens in a neighborhood like garden. In the end they find out a way to get Mrs. Fullerton out legally, with sufficient reason, which is to put that old intolerable house on the lane. It seems that poor Mrs. Fullerton has no choice. She must leave the place she has lived for 40 years! It is too cruel. If the young people have paid minimum attention to her, I will not feel so bad for Mrs. Fullerton. They shouldn’t treat her like that. Mary, who is the only person doesn’t agree with other people, but she was struggling to find a balanced point between two generations. Nobody is wrong but Mrs. Fullerton must leave. Why? Is there another solution to keep everybody happy?
Anyway, I can’t agree with the young people’s values. Everyone is getting old. Mrs. Fullerton’s is a reflection for us in the future. I don’t want to be Mrs. Fullerton, and I will never repeat the young people did to her.
向大家请教该怎么个改,还有什么地方该加强
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