上AllPoetry首页的一首诗歌《Who’s the Guide?》

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Who’s the Guide?
by TG


a fish swam from the river into the ocean.
the kaffir lily had a pot and soil changed.
southwest wind blew the pink petals off
fruits grew where blossoms bloomed.
green lotuses in the pond just showed their points
dragonflies sucked the dew drops.
the moment I turned my head
saw a red skirt floating under the plane tree
it was warm as if spring in April.
the train drew a slow arc
entering the station
colorful trolley cases sliding and
dancing on the platform.

I didn’t know which exit to go.
in the evening, full of ears were
す み ま せ ん (I'm so sorry)
and ありがとございます (thank you a lot).
in the morning, the pilot broadcast -
ladies and gentlemen,
may I have your attention please.
we’ll land at the Atlanta Airport in thirty minutes.
please keep your seatbelt fastened until


quicken your steps
to find out the Guide




评分和评论comments:

Autorank Total 10 ( higher is reduced to 10 ), professional similarity 10 (of 10), concrete vs abstract 1 (of 2, too strong -1), noun/verb/etc order 0.9 (of 1)

Likes: kevin, Sand Singer, Sarah Evans, tiramelsu, kaye, Oméga.á.m., Let.it, Samara, Cozyglow, Alice Z, Prathibha.E, Brandon836 To reply, click a comment.

Cozyglow - This is a great piece, very deserving of the front page pick! Congratulations! Love the scenes you described here and your word choices. Every transition is flowing elegantly. Perhaps the nature's law is at work, the Guide? a month ago x rate: , , skip


Alice Z - So many turning points in one beautiful poem, and who is the guide? Good question. A very meaningful and beautiful read. Love it! Congratulations on this FPP a month ago x rate: , , skip

Alice Z - Who's the Guide? Good question. I think it's fate, something that we cannot control by ourselves. Thank you for sharing this amazing piece.

Inspired a month ago x


Sarah Evans - ← A scene well captured here. Travelling between countries with different perspectives. Congratulations on your front page pick.

Inspired! a month ago x rate: , , skip


Oméga.á.m. - ← Very tactical and transcendental cadence poetry skills a month ago x rate: , , skip


Let.it - Its lovely!!!

Keep on it a month ago x


Prathibha.E - so good! wish I could travel here..... a month ago x




中文版本

《转折点》


鱼随河流入海
君子兰换了盆和土
风来把粉色花瓣吹落,
开花的地方长出青的果实
池塘里绿荷露出角,尖尖的,
蜻蜓吮吸着上面的清露
回头的瞬,梧桐树下飘来一条红裙子,
空气和煦得如四月的春
进站之前,火车划了一个缓慢的弧
月台上五颜六色的拉杆箱滑动着舞步,
不知要去哪个方向
傍晚的耳边是すみません(真是对不起您了)
ありがとございます(实在是感激不尽)
清晨听见ladies and gentlemen, may I
have your attention please.
may I have your attention please.
in thirty minutes we’ll land at
the hartsfield-jackson atlanta international airport.
please keep your seatbelt fastened until …

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友友们一周快乐:) -忒忒绿- 给 忒忒绿 发送悄悄话 忒忒绿 的博客首页 忒忒绿 的个人群组 (0 bytes) () 10/04/2022 postreply 08:41:00

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花帅尿尿,good morning:) -忒忒绿- 给 忒忒绿 发送悄悄话 忒忒绿 的博客首页 忒忒绿 的个人群组 (0 bytes) () 10/04/2022 postreply 09:49:00

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美坛出去的,当然是All poetry的首页水平:) -妖妖灵- 给 妖妖灵 发送悄悄话 妖妖灵 的博客首页 妖妖灵 的个人群组 (0 bytes) () 10/04/2022 postreply 19:47:55

美凤好,真会说话:) -忒忒绿- 给 忒忒绿 发送悄悄话 忒忒绿 的博客首页 忒忒绿 的个人群组 (0 bytes) () 10/04/2022 postreply 19:58:00

我是幸运而已:) -忒忒绿- 给 忒忒绿 发送悄悄话 忒忒绿 的博客首页 忒忒绿 的个人群组 (0 bytes) () 10/04/2022 postreply 20:15:00

水平在那摆着。连这点自信还没有:) -妖妖灵- 给 妖妖灵 发送悄悄话 妖妖灵 的博客首页 妖妖灵 的个人群组 (0 bytes) () 10/04/2022 postreply 20:50:31

恭喜忒绿。首页进来,谢谢网管,上AllPoetry首页的一首诗歌《Who’s the Guide?》推荐成功 -梅雨潭- 给 梅雨潭 发送悄悄话 梅雨潭 的个人群组 (0 bytes) () 10/04/2022 postreply 19:54:46

谢谢网管和妖妖! -忒忒绿- 给 忒忒绿 发送悄悄话 忒忒绿 的博客首页 忒忒绿 的个人群组 (0 bytes) () 10/04/2022 postreply 20:01:00

网管是不是对美坛开后门了 hahaha:)) -忒忒绿- 给 忒忒绿 发送悄悄话 忒忒绿 的博客首页 忒忒绿 的个人群组 (0 bytes) () 10/04/2022 postreply 20:02:00

温故而知新,再读再赞,谢谢诗人忒绿分享佳作。 -CBA7- 给 CBA7 发送悄悄话 CBA7 的博客首页 CBA7 的个人群组 (0 bytes) () 10/04/2022 postreply 21:05:59

Who's the Guide? I think it's fate too. Great piece! -盈盈一笑间- 给 盈盈一笑间 发送悄悄话 盈盈一笑间 的博客首页 盈盈一笑间 的个人群组 (0 bytes) () 10/05/2022 postreply 05:11:41

这篇还挺耐读的。恭喜绿兄。这是颤音常去的那个英文诗网站吗? -盈盈一笑间- 给 盈盈一笑间 发送悄悄话 盈盈一笑间 的博客首页 盈盈一笑间 的个人群组 (0 bytes) () 10/05/2022 postreply 05:13:11

谢谢各位来读:) -忒忒绿- 给 忒忒绿 发送悄悄话 忒忒绿 的博客首页 忒忒绿 的个人群组 (0 bytes) () 10/07/2022 postreply 21:35:00

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