【少年锦时】 Once upon a time 旧的 挖出来参加活动

Once upon a time

Once upon a time,
I stepped on half a dime.
For the other half, I searched the playground,
but wished for a pound.
I stumbled and so flied the half dime,
in a curve ended in a lily pound.
I heard giggles as resonating as chime,
before I turned my body around.
It is the girl from my neighbor,
in her hands a snow-white lily flower.
She shrouded me with a smell of thyme,
and left on my bruised lips a taste of lime.

© 5 years ago   

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Z - Good fun

4 years ago  

George Hamilton - A

This is a poem just for a poem and well constructed, alive and happy.

5 years ago   

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• 哈哈，场景很好玩，还巧妙地用了“ in for a penny, in for a pound ” -妖妖灵- ♀ (0 bytes) () 06/03/2022 postreply 16:24:16

• 瞎玩，谢谢 -颤音- ♂ (0 bytes) () 06/04/2022 postreply 09:41:52

• 写得好！读颤音的诗，我会忍不住盯着韵脚看。这首是 aabb,abab的写法？：） -盈盈一笑间- ♀ (0 bytes) () 06/03/2022 postreply 22:26:01

• 俺都没刻意，就是一边写，一边默读，怎么顺溜怎么来，觉得14行诗那种还是太rigid -颤音- ♂ (0 bytes) () 06/04/2022 postreply 09:43:23

• 厉害！诗坛有一个常年写14行诗的，可以去探讨一下。。 -盈盈一笑间- ♀ (0 bytes) () 06/05/2022 postreply 10:08:34

• 恭喜颤音。首页进来，谢谢网管，【少年锦时】 Once upon a time 旧的 挖出来参加活动 推荐成功 -梅雨潭- ♂ (0 bytes) () 06/05/2022 postreply 17:47:46

• 谢谢 -颤音- ♂ (0 bytes) () 06/06/2022 postreply 16:57:35