尝试写英文诗,请指教。谢谢!
The Meadow
Downy dandelion parachutes
Gliding through the air
As the wind blows
Tiny yet strong seeds
Sprouting up to the ground
As the sun glows
Wild flowers and grasses
Painting an endless meadow
As the stream flows
Snow will fall
Hiding everything beneath
Till the wakening moment
As time knows
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The Meadow
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• A very rhymic poem!Very vivid and I can picture it!:) -妖妖灵- ♀ (0 bytes) () 05/29/2022 postreply 22:55:32
• 谢谢分享。点赞。 -chuntianle- ♀ (0 bytes) () 05/29/2022 postreply 23:26:43
• 谢谢阅读!总觉得倒数第二句有些不妥,缺失主语。改成如下,如何?希望向各位学习,谢谢! -HaiFengCC- ♀ (117 bytes) () 05/30/2022 postreply 06:35:48
• waken是动词原型, 本身就带被动的意思, be不必吧? 这个字的语法可以推敲 -移花接木- ♂ (554 bytes) () 05/30/2022 postreply 07:25:38
• 又做了修改后,才看到您的貼子。谢谢建议,看看这一稿怎么样?见上贴,谢谢! -HaiFengCC- ♀ (0 bytes) () 05/30/2022 postreply 07:31:20
• 好,有个typo -移花接木- ♂ (0 bytes) () 05/30/2022 postreply 07:38:32
• Sharp eyes. 多谢! -HaiFengCC- ♀ (0 bytes) () 05/30/2022 postreply 08:42:50
• 恭喜HaiFeng。首页进来,谢谢网管,The Meadow 推荐成功 -梅雨潭- ♂ (38 bytes) () 05/30/2022 postreply 15:05:53
• 首页是文学城首页的意思: -梅雨潭- ♂ (250 bytes) () 05/30/2022 postreply 16:08:28
• 啊,上首页了?第一次写英文诗,旨在学习交流。谢版主推荐,受宠若惊。 -HaiFengCC- ♀ (0 bytes) () 05/30/2022 postreply 17:17:24