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来源: 马下人于 2015-06-02 06:41:53 [档案] [博客] [旧帖] [给我悄悄话] 本文已被阅读：次 (465 bytes)

回答: I would think 由 youdecide 于 2015-06-01 22:46:12

哼着他的曲 -> 唱着他的歌 -- I hesitated between the two choices. I picked up "哼着他的曲" to add change of the rhythm but "唱着他的歌" is more consistent with the rest of the poem and also sounds excessive repetition. The latter may be a better choice thinking about the overall effect.

那女孩子正在缝补洗浆 -＞在缝补洗浆的女孩 --I use the way to rhyme.

Thank you again.