莎士比亚《Venus and Adonis》翻译 - 150

Thus stands she in a trembling ecstasy;

Till, cheering up her senses all dismay'd,

She tells them 'tis a causeless fantasy,

And childish error, that they are afraid;

Bids them leave quaking, bids them fear no more:—

And with that word she spied the hunted boar,

 

战栗晕极女神立； 

定神驱恐精气振， 

非分之想须无忌， 

惧若小童太过甚；

莫喊莫叫莫惊慌：

此时野彘入目光。

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• 第三句: 恐惧如幻实不必 -淘金客- ♂ (143 bytes) () 02/15/2013 postreply 17:26:35

• 好！只是最后一句应该平声押韵 -bmdn- ♀ (0 bytes) () 02/15/2013 postreply 18:59:17

• 噢， 我一直没明白ABABCC里面韵的选择, 请解释一下。 -淘金客- ♂ (0 bytes) () 02/15/2013 postreply 20:30:13

• 你的韵没问题，只是降调 -bmdn- ♀ (12 bytes) () 02/16/2013 postreply 09:45:46

• 恩，5，6句升，那1-4句呢？ -淘金客- ♂ (167 bytes) () 02/16/2013 postreply 10:55:39

• "劝众不必自忧扰" 怎么样，离原文意思靠近点。 -聚曦亭- ♀ (0 bytes) () 02/15/2013 postreply 21:00:39

• 明白你的意思，这样就不押韵了. -聚曦亭- ♀ (0 bytes) () 02/15/2013 postreply 21:11:17

• : ) ), 押晕了吧还押， 聚大侠, the furtherest distance in the world, ... -淘金客- ♂ (0 bytes) () 02/16/2013 postreply 04:02:10

• 咫尺千里 -聚曦亭- ♀ (0 bytes) () 02/16/2013 postreply 08:05:23

• 聚侠，看来你是serious! 依我这里them指神志senses,不是众。？ -淘金客- ♂ (0 bytes) () 02/16/2013 postreply 09:20:45

• 韵梅亚好， ：），和我一样。 -淘金客- ♂ (0 bytes) () 02/15/2013 postreply 20:35:15

• The furtherest distance in the world is between knowing what is -淘金客- ♂ (0 bytes) () 02/16/2013 postreply 04:05:37

• 挺好 -bmdn- ♀ (0 bytes) () 02/16/2013 postreply 09:47:18