无题

Sonorously quiet,
He drove on.

Wind pounding on the window,
Accompanying his trip,
To another town.

Tears burst into his eyes,
Sorrowfulness held his tongue.

How he hopes,
He were in that train soon,
On the journey back,
To his home country,
To his home town.

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• 请各位打侠指正，新周愉快！ -yingyudidida- ♂ (0 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 05:43:24

• Nice ... So Nice ... -Lucidus- ♂ (0 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 07:00:14

• Hello Lucidus, have a nice day! -yingyudidida- ♂ (0 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 07:24:27

• 滴答老师，小钊大侠给你提提意见 ：） -小钊- ♂ (1202 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 08:05:11

• 提的好，谢谢，听我一一道来, 再考虑如何改 -yingyudidida- ♂ (5510 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 09:27:39

• 加了一个： 无题 （v.2) -yingyudidida- ♂ (1136 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 09:36:00

• 真挚感人的诗，谢分享。 -楚姗珊- ♀ (0 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 09:27:04

• 谢谢，是班长吧！ -yingyudidida- ♂ (0 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 09:29:41

• 读了你的诗，耳边响起了费翔《故乡的云》(1987春节晚会): -楚姗珊- ♀ (568 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 09:54:58

• 记得出国前大家一起喝酒，我的一个哥哥哭了，他说对不起他眼窝浅 -yingyudidida- ♂ (39 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 10:21:39

• 问候yingyudidida，谢谢分享。 -楚姗珊- ♀ (1780 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 11:07:43

• 谢谢姗珊！ -yingyudidida- ♂ (0 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 11:44:45

• 好诗。上次回国看到火车窗外大雪纷飞，我想到童年。 -bearsback- ♂ (0 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 13:14:27

• 谢谢bear，我也是自娱自乐，写东西还是向你们众高手学习。 -yingyudidida- ♂ (0 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 14:42:28

• Bill好牛啊！应该也读出来。鼓掌！ -beautifulwind- ♀ (0 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 17:27:11

• 是要读，谢谢。 -yingyudidida- ♂ (0 bytes) () 03/21/2013 postreply 05:39:13

• 从读诗到写诗，祝贺BILL大侠更上一层楼！ -ntotl- ♂ (0 bytes) () 03/20/2013 postreply 23:37:12

• Never Too Old To Learn - 谢谢。 -yingyudidida- ♂ (0 bytes) () 03/21/2013 postreply 05:38:26

• 报告ntotl,他以前就写过诗的呀,[I am a leaf]就是其中的一首: -楚姗珊- ♀ (133 bytes) () 03/21/2013 postreply 07:38:00

• 紫君记性好爱心浓偶像啊。 -billnet- ♂ (0 bytes) () 03/21/2013 postreply 08:09:01

• 是你的诗写得好,所以我就记住了。“偶像”可不敢当呀，过奖了。 -紫君- ♀ (0 bytes) () 03/21/2013 postreply 08:48:19

• 惭愧。美坛育人，继续深造争取当个好学生。 -billnet- ♂ (0 bytes) () 03/21/2013 postreply 09:19:15

• 一起学习，共同进步。 -紫君- ♀ (0 bytes) () 03/21/2013 postreply 09:58:20

• 就是就是，这样是好！！ -billnet- ♂ (0 bytes) () 03/22/2013 postreply 11:14:36