再贴一首旧的先中文再翻译 dream 留言很让我感动

梦

 

画廊里

一把躺着的小提琴旁

我在等你

而你的影子很长

你的脸庞落在了琴弦上

你的脚却顶着半掩的门

耳边一个男人在反复地问

你在哪里

我回答

她在等你

 

Dream

In a gallery,
next to a violin lying on the floor,
I'm waiting for you.
Your shadow’s long,
your face casts on the strings,
but your foot levers the door ajar.
A man repeatedly asks by my ears-
where you are?
My answer-
She’s waiting for you.
© a year ago, xx   
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Aurore O. Boulan - Visual, Arithmetic. Reminds me of Tom Wait's song ''Alice''. The final interjection, after the painted remembrance, and longing, calls for spirits to linger in hopes of requited affection, and a mutual sharing of their plight. I like it very much. If I had to give any advice...Perhaps I'd only invite you to continue on further this path of exquisite balance between setting and action. Dialogue is a very interesting tool in poetry. I implore you to explore it, and listen to the inner voices of inspiration. Muse or poet.

Great posta year ago   x

 

Jenny Middleton - I love the symbolism you build up in this poem to convey a sense of dream. a year ago   x

 

The Dark Faery - I like your poem.  The flow moves at a good pace.  Good imagery, I can see the shadows and faces. 

 

 

Femfem - Dream! Dream!! Dream!!!
I thoroughly enjoyed your depth. Thank you!a year ago   x

 

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• 这首梦，是你的原创吗？写得真好！ -盈盈一笑间- ♀ (0 bytes) () 05/03/2021 postreply 16:47:07

• 谢谢!你说好，必须是原创LOL -颤音- ♂ (0 bytes) () 05/03/2021 postreply 17:14:33

• 好诗，翻译也棒棒哒：） -甜虫虫- ♀ (0 bytes) () 05/03/2021 postreply 18:33:21

• 谢谢！ -颤音- ♂ (0 bytes) () 05/04/2021 postreply 10:02:07

• 我试着理解这个梦，搞不清关系，也许因为是梦：） -beautifulwind- ♀ (0 bytes) () 05/03/2021 postreply 21:19:58

• 太简单了三角恋LOL -颤音- ♂ (0 bytes) () 05/04/2021 postreply 10:00:51

• 来了 -忒忒绿- ♂ (0 bytes) () 05/04/2021 postreply 08:20:00

• 先把箭头去掉再来LOL -颤音- ♂ (0 bytes) () 05/04/2021 postreply 10:01:27

• 译得好！蛮面对！ -天山晨- ♂ (0 bytes) () 05/04/2021 postreply 18:41:03