hammerheadshark:
A man knows a wine only at tipsy;
A flower becomes a true beauty only at half-blooming.
My revised version:
A man knows a good wine only when he is at tipsy.
A flower reaches its prime only when blooming halfway.
(Even number of syllable and rhyme)
My new version
所有跟帖:
• Sorry, 应该是syllables -聚曦亭- ♀ (0 bytes) () 07/21/2013 postreply 07:43:27
• Yes, polish it. -hammerheadshark- ♀ (0 bytes) () 07/21/2013 postreply 07:57:16
• 有点那个... -聚曦亭- ♀ (1263 bytes) () 07/21/2013 postreply 09:19:01
• Hope this will clarify -hammerheadshark- ♀ (749 bytes) () 07/21/2013 postreply 09:32:17
• And it will improve your version if you change "a man" into "one -聚曦亭- ♀ (68 bytes) () 07/21/2013 postreply 10:18:15
• Some words got cut off. So here is the complete comment: -聚曦亭- ♀ (198 bytes) () 07/21/2013 postreply 10:21:30
• I really don't see the difference. -hammerheadshark- ♀ (220 bytes) () 07/21/2013 postreply 10:28:55
• Yes, it would be a big improvement! -聚曦亭- ♀ (711 bytes) () 07/21/2013 postreply 10:43:52
• I thought you'd go there -hammerheadshark- ♀ (245 bytes) () 07/21/2013 postreply 13:31:36
• No, it doesn't. -SanGabriel- ♀ (642 bytes) () 07/21/2013 postreply 10:23:39
• As I said -hammerheadshark- ♀ (220 bytes) () 07/21/2013 postreply 10:33:53
• But you didn't answer my questions. Replicated below: -SanGabriel- ♀ (361 bytes) () 07/21/2013 postreply 10:46:14
• Ok, -hammerheadshark- ♀ (677 bytes) () 07/21/2013 postreply 13:24:51