回复：女儿参加比赛的作文

1. "I would say that it means the difference between people’s skin color, eye color… basically..."  Should it be "difference(s) between people's skin color(s) and eye color(s)", grammatically? or "differences among people's skin colors, eye colors...", logically?

2. "They might completely balance each other out,"  Would "They might be completely opposite" come out more natural?

3. "Diversities means the difference between looks and personality"  Sould it be "personalities" for consistency?

4. "If there was no such thing as diversity"  "were" is more approperiate.

5. "Diversity can also be the difference between jobs, and between religions"  Should be "among" instead of "between"? Again, either "a difference" or "differences" should be there for the sake of consistency.

6. "Their mom could have green eyes, and their dad could have brown eyes, but wears tinted contacts and pretends to have hazel eyes. "  Ambiguity. Who wears tinted contacts? Mom or dad?

7. "In a way, diversity is the borders that separate our identities from others, from our names, to our likes and dislikes."  Would "be our likes or dislikes" be more logical?

 

 

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• 鲨鱼什么时候给我们介绍一下你学英语的经验呗？ -sportwoman- ♀ (70 bytes) () 04/01/2012 postreply 06:58:36

• I don't have much experience -hammerheadshark- ♀ (239 bytes) () 04/01/2012 postreply 07:24:10

• Although -sportwoman- ♀ (1731 bytes) () 04/01/2012 postreply 07:40:27

• Can I borrow some? -hammerheadshark- ♀ (501 bytes) () 04/01/2012 postreply 07:46:20

• 好啊 -sportwoman- ♀ (76 bytes) () 04/01/2012 postreply 07:53:54

• It is raining ! -hammerheadshark- ♀ (210 bytes) () 04/01/2012 postreply 12:26:51

• Nice to know -sportwoman- ♀ (2694 bytes) () 04/01/2012 postreply 13:48:23

• 鲨鱼兄博览群书下笔如有神，是我学习的榜样！ -sportwoman- ♀ (0 bytes) () 04/01/2012 postreply 07:47:52

• 是我们大家学习的榜样！ -圈外闲人- ♀ (0 bytes) () 04/01/2012 postreply 18:00:42

• 我要改口称鲨鱼老师了，他人是真好，我作业没交出来都没有被罚。 -sportwoman- ♀ (0 bytes) () 04/01/2012 postreply 18:09:45

• 老师手下留情！ -圈外闲人- ♀ (0 bytes) () 04/01/2012 postreply 20:42:31

• 学习了，鲨鱼老师！ -圈外闲人- ♀ (63 bytes) () 04/01/2012 postreply 18:00:02

• Come on,you over-estimated me. Besides, I could be wrong. -hammerheadshark- ♀ (0 bytes) () 04/01/2012 postreply 21:39:34

• 而且还那么谦虚，鲨鱼老师就是好。 -sportwoman- ♀ (0 bytes) () 04/02/2012 postreply 04:23:41