你不嫌烦的话，我又把后半部分改动了：

Why is it called “Three Cups of Tea”? It comes from the a Pakistani’s tradition: in Pakistan and Afghanistan, people drink three cups of tea to do business; the first cup of tea means you are a stranger, [should be ; I think as these three are separated sentences]the second cup means you become a friend of them, the third cup means you join their family, [and for their family] for which/whom you are prepared to do anything. Here goes Greg Mortenson, a climber, was trying to conquer one of the toughest mountains in the world-K2, which [is happenedèhappened/occurred] in Pakistan; unfortunately not only he was suffering from the altitude of the mountain, but also lost his way when he tried to reach the top. Luckily he was rescued by Haji Ali, [the?]Korphe Village Chief.  It surprised Mortenson that he wasn’t viewed as a foreigner by the village members; in fact, he felt welcomed and was offered three cups of tea. One day, he saw some kids were drawing and writing under a big tree. He was told that they did not even have a single school in this village[ for children to learn, 这里either 去掉to learn，or change to “where children can study”]. Mortenson felt sorry for these kids, moreover he was touched by these kids’ eagerness for learning. He promised to build a school for them. Mortenson went back to the United States, and worked hard to amass money from benefactors. Finally he had enough money to build a school for [the] children in Korphe village. However, things were not that easy, there were troubles and obstacles on the road to successes; indeed, Mortenson needed to overcome many difficulties in order to meet his promise.

It was the first third of the story. I stopped at there, and started to think. What made an American want to help Pakistan children? Compassion? Love? Probably his life experience? Mortenson has a younger sister who was died at a very young age due to medical problems. Mortenson loves his sister. Trying to reach the pinnacle of the toughest mountain in the world not only for himself, but very much also for his sister because he wanted to let the nature remember his poor young sister. [This is not a complete sentence, it is just a “trying to do”….建议He was trying。。。]However, he did not accomplish the goal[我觉得reach the goal比较好，或者accomplish that]. He was disappointed and sad; he felt his world was dark.  “When [the sky] is dark enough, you can see the stars.” Think it in a different way, the world will be different. 【这个句子在这里不知道是想说什么，是对作者说的，还是对review的读者说的？】Although he did not make it to the summit of the mountain, he had a chance to perceive people【perceive不这样用】 from another world, and gain different perspectives too. Mortenson still loves his sister, but in a different way, which is more remarkable and philanthropic.  

 

 

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• 哦，第四行的here goes应该去掉。 -非文学青年- ♀ (0 bytes) () 03/30/2011 postreply 17:00:43

• thank you ! you are very kind> -幼时蓝精灵- ♀ (0 bytes) () 03/30/2011 postreply 17:47:01