我的一篇商业英文写作

我的工作涉及大量的技术性的写作包括technical specifications, user manual, business correspondence。

下面这一篇是我们一个客户让我帮他们写的，为了提交一个技术上的申请。没用任何参考，就是一口气写出来的。从他们让我写，到写完传给他们，用了不到半个小时，包括一大段的程序分析（没放在这里，用省略号代替了）。

写得有点仓促，见笑了。轻砸啊：）

Hi XXX,

Here is our statement of business justification of the request regarding the increase of quota limit on Category Links.

“As our business grows, we are having more products added and more categories will be created for those products. We would like to utilize Category Links to market and promote our similar or related groups of products on a category landing page to generate more sales. We understand the risk and would like to move forward with an increase quota limit on Category Links.”

Please review our use case below:

We have near 50,000 products in our master catalog with 17 sub-categories under the XXX catalog currently. One of subcategory, XXX, has reached its current quota limit of 50 on category links. We are approaching this number in a few other categories quickly.

XXX is the category link’s rendering template which loops through a collection of CategoryLinks objects to display the target category’s image of each category link. When clicking on each image, it will open the landing page of that target category which contains products.

Here is the code logic for rendering the category landing page:

...

Based on our business need and potential growth in the next 5 years, we request for a quota limit increase to 500 on Category Links. Please consider our request.

Thank you,

XXX

所有跟帖： 

• 哈哈。知道自己就是普通人一个，从没想过要拼颜值。更没什么才华可言：）谢谢。 -亦舒- ♀ (0 bytes) () 07/18/2019 postreply 21:46:33

• 顶你一下吧。都忙着赶人呢。 -南侠- ♂ (0 bytes) () 07/18/2019 postreply 21:16:56

• 谢谢：）你们谈的太高大上了，我都插不上话。 -亦舒- ♀ (0 bytes) () 07/18/2019 postreply 21:50:10

• 文体流畅，虽然有一点点瑕疵，但是瑕不掩瑜。 -happybob- ♂ (0 bytes) () 07/18/2019 postreply 21:17:36

• 能让人看懂就行了。我写东西跟我说话差不多，都是直来直去：）谢谢美颜 -亦舒- ♀ (0 bytes) () 07/18/2019 postreply 21:53:26

• 小毛病，Business needs，用复数会比较好。 -侧卫1- ♂ (0 bytes) () 07/18/2019 postreply 21:26:53

• 是的是的。应该多检查几遍：） -亦舒- ♀ (0 bytes) () 07/18/2019 postreply 21:54:42

• 赞镁铝！ 今晚俺学又爹！ -颤音- ♂ (0 bytes) () 07/18/2019 postreply 21:32:38

• 嗯。镁铝 合金 有很好的强度和韧性，我喜欢！ -亦舒- ♀ (0 bytes) () 07/18/2019 postreply 21:58:07

• 正式信函别用Hi，用Hello也好一些。用Dear Mr. 或者Good morning Mr. 比较不会错 -greenoasis- ♀ (0 bytes) () 07/18/2019 postreply 21:37:08

• 我平时连Hi 都不用，直接称呼first name。是这样，Hello 比Hi稍微正规一点点：） -亦舒- ♀ (0 bytes) () 07/18/2019 postreply 22:00:37

• 尽管我写不了这么好，但我会玉里挑瑕， -李哼- ♂ (582 bytes) () 07/18/2019 postreply 21:49:32

• 太谦虚了。同意。所以，有个人帮 review一下，就好多了。或者写完多读几遍，会发现很多问题。 -亦舒- ♀ (0 bytes) () 07/18/2019 postreply 22:06:30

• 已经很好了。平时我们大家写完了都懒得再去看一眼，，， -李哼- ♂ (0 bytes) () 07/18/2019 postreply 22:27:40

• 写的比我好。你们用we 挺多的。不过我好久不和客户打交道了忘了那些规矩了 -julie116- ♀ (0 bytes) () 07/18/2019 postreply 22:28:23

• 是客户让我帮他们写的。所以要用we。你谦虚了。你中文写得这么好，英文一定棒！ -亦舒- ♀ (0 bytes) () 07/20/2019 postreply 08:51:09

• 非常好！Most impressive. 赞。 Here is a modified version for your ... -煮鸡蛋- ♂ (1637 bytes) () 07/18/2019 postreply 22:38:20

• 试一下哈， -碧蓝天- ♀ (515 bytes) () 07/18/2019 postreply 23:07:34

• 我大学的时候必修商业英文写作，必须用大词，多用被动语句。 后来经常被女老板指责写的不够亲切：） -不聊天- ♀ (0 bytes) () 07/18/2019 postreply 23:01:25