Good for you! 不过觉得第一段完全可以去掉

我来修改一下看看

As you may have already known, a major earthquake has hit SICHUAN， a province of more than 100 millions in my motherland - China. More than 28,000 confirmed dead, and death toll could double. Hundreds of thousands lost their homes, and many even lost their lives.

People desperately need help and assistance.
I appreciate it if you could donate to the relief effort, here is the website of American Red Cross

http://www.redcross.org/news/in/profiles/Intl_profile_ChinaEarthquake.asp?s_src=HomeLatestNews

Many thanks!

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• 我也修改了一下,发了二十个人,马上就有4个人回EMAIL, -七叶一枝花- ♀ (34 bytes) () 05/17/2008 postreply 07:31:51

• Great to hear! I did it too -aChineseBostonian- ♂ (0 bytes) () 05/17/2008 postreply 07:42:35

• THANKS -七叶一枝花- ♀ (0 bytes) () 05/17/2008 postreply 08:00:39