What are you trying to say?

来源: Darma 于 2005-12-28 22:02:43 [] [旧帖] [给我悄悄话] 阅读数 : (790 bytes)

I don't see any big problem with grammar. However, it doesn't sound very professional, and the last sentence sounds more like Chinglish. Overall, it's not clear to me what you are trying to say here.

I don't want to discourage you, but your English needs a major overhaul. If I were you, I'd spend every minute to improve language skills, or you won't land a job you want.

If you want the recipant to know that you can work long hours, I'd say:

Dear XXX,

I am very interested in working at XXX. I am ready to meet any of the challenges requested by the job even if it means working long hours.Should you have any questions regarding my applicaiton, feel free to contact me.

Looking forward to hearing from you.

Best regards,

A&F

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• thank you so much -A&F- ♂ 给 A&F 发送悄悄话 (360 bytes) () 12/28/2005 postreply 22:12:49

• this is the last email i sent -A&F- ♂ 给 A&F 发送悄悄话 (579 bytes) () 12/28/2005 postreply 22:22:37

• Wrong, wrong and wrong! -Darma- ♀ 给 Darma 发送悄悄话 (907 bytes) () 12/28/2005 postreply 22:50:16

• 回复：Wrong, wrong and wrong! -A&F- ♂ 给 A&F 发送悄悄话 (324 bytes) () 12/28/2005 postreply 23:04:00

• i fir their need and that's why -A&F- ♂ 给 A&F 发送悄悄话 (13 bytes) () 12/28/2005 postreply 23:04:58

• 回复：Wrong, wrong and wrong! -A&F- ♂ 给 A&F 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 12/28/2005 postreply 23:07:15

• i don't understand -A&F- ♂ 给 A&F 发送悄悄话 (83 bytes) () 12/28/2005 postreply 23:08:37

• you are not professional. -colala- ♀ 给 colala 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 12/28/2005 postreply 23:12:51

• you are very professional -colala- ♀ 给 colala 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 12/28/2005 postreply 23:11:15

• ok then -A&F- ♂ 给 A&F 发送悄悄话 (90 bytes) () 12/28/2005 postreply 23:17:00

• 如DARMA所说的,你要把自己想象成一个老板 -colala- ♀ 给 colala 发送悄悄话 (429 bytes) () 12/28/2005 postreply 23:31:31

• 是有些语发错误， -A&F- ♂ 给 A&F 发送悄悄话 (261 bytes) () 12/29/2005 postreply 00:06:30

• You have no idea how busy is tax season in some CPA firms. -jliu3885- ♂ 给 jliu3885 发送悄悄话 (662 bytes) () 12/29/2005 postreply 07:08:13

• 问题就是他们愿不愿意，肯不肯相信我能做好 -A&F- ♂ 给 A&F 发送悄悄话 (116 bytes) () 12/29/2005 postreply 00:11:48

• 我觉得找工作这件是也是随意性的 -A&F- ♂ 给 A&F 发送悄悄话 (126 bytes) () 12/29/2005 postreply 00:19:07

• I like your attitude -71149- ♀ 给 71149 发送悄悄话 (154 bytes) () 12/29/2005 postreply 08:18:58

• 回复：this is the last email i sent -70148- ♀ 给 70148 发送悄悄话 (475 bytes) () 12/28/2005 postreply 23:37:06

• 回复：回复：this is the last email i sent -eh- ♀ 给 eh 发送悄悄话 (25 bytes) () 12/29/2005 postreply 07:03:49

• 回复：回复：回复：this is the last email i sent -70148- ♀ 给 70148 发送悄悄话 (218 bytes) () 12/29/2005 postreply 07:42:25

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