AO: 看看这个essay怎么样

本帖于 2022-12-08 17:25:59 时间, 由普通用户 12度圆缺 编辑

 


Growing up in a Hispanic, first-generation, low-income family, I have faced many challenges and obstacles on my path to pursuing higher education. However, these challenges have only made me more determined and driven to succeed.
One of the biggest challenges I have faced is financial insecurity. To help support my family, I have worked picking blueberries on a farm during the summers. This hard work has taught me the value of determination and perseverance, and has helped to develop my strong work ethic.
Despite the challenges I have faced, I have remained focused on my education and my goals. I am passionate about computer science and its potential to make a positive impact on human rights. I believe that with a computer science degree from Harvard, I will be able to make a real difference in the world.
In my free time, I enjoy playing the trombone in the school band. Music has always been an important part of my life, and I find that it helps me to relax and stay focused. I am excited at the prospect of continuing my musical pursuits at Harvard, and I believe that my experiences and interests make me a strong candidate for admission.
Overall, I am determined to overcome the challenges I have faced and to use my education and passion for computer science to make a positive impact on the world. I am excited at the prospect of attending Harvard and contributing to the vibrant community there.
 

 

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中学水平。不怎么样 -avw- 给 avw 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 12/08/2022 postreply 17:18:58

这个是老中父母帮忙写的么? LOL -jingzhumama- 给 jingzhumama 发送悄悄话 jingzhumama 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 12/08/2022 postreply 17:19:33

这不是AI写的吧?第一句话就秒杀众人了 -Huyou2023- 给 Huyou2023 发送悄悄话 (167 bytes) () 12/08/2022 postreply 17:20:31

应该是 -avw- 给 avw 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 12/08/2022 postreply 17:21:28

+1 -zeno- 给 zeno 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 12/08/2022 postreply 17:21:34

老中当年蹩脚英文,申请研究生还是可以用的上的,其他学校名字改一下群发 -Huyou2023- 给 Huyou2023 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 12/08/2022 postreply 17:33:13

还别说,有农地里摘草莓经历的人,写这文章不算差 -tibuko- 给 tibuko 发送悄悄话 tibuko 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 12/08/2022 postreply 17:23:06

ChatGPT 写的 -12度圆缺- 给 12度圆缺 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 12/08/2022 postreply 17:26:53

比较空洞,没有亮点。一般般 -清水港- 给 清水港 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 12/08/2022 postreply 17:28:44

有了它,小中大学生作弊就容易了。呵呵! -兔8- 给 兔8 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 12/08/2022 postreply 17:42:27

246词。这是在回答“Why H" 的问题吧 -trivial- 给 trivial 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 12/08/2022 postreply 18:04:41

这难道不是我的这蹩脚英语水准吗,这样作文出来AO马上刷掉了,就差赤果果威胁我是一代我是穷人我很努力的你赶紧收了就 -秋的天- 给 秋的天 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 12/08/2022 postreply 18:17:00

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