帮我看一下有没有错误，谢谢

The Old Willow Tree

The blazing sun was setting over the cornfield. I knew that the sun could not reach me from under the old willow tree. It protected me from the sun and made me feel less lonely. Sure, Tamarin was here and Sylvia was here, but being with the willow tree made me feel safe. I know I can't prevent the old willow tree from rotting but I wish I could. Soon the willow tree died and all of the animals could not be protected from the sun. I am lonely now, oh so lonely. 

Sylvia bounded over to me with a small seed in her paws. "Look!look!" Sylvia cried."what is it?" I wondered aloud. " it's a willow seed!" She dug a hole in the ground and planted it. 

Soon the willow seed grew and all of the animals were happy!" Hurrah " they yelled!"Hurrah " and that's the End.

所有跟帖： 

• 写的很好。偶提不出意见。 -Rockeymountain- ♀ (0 bytes) () 10/03/2018 postreply 18:34:50

• 小孩写的？很生动。 -Francine- ♀ (50 bytes) () 10/03/2018 postreply 18:40:26

• 谢谢，9随孩子写的 -tax2- ♀ (0 bytes) () 10/03/2018 postreply 18:43:46

• 九岁是很有才华的， 恭喜恭喜 -阳光玉兔- ♀ (0 bytes) () 10/03/2018 postreply 18:45:12

• 谢谢，不看书，只看漫画 -tax2- ♀ (0 bytes) () 10/03/2018 postreply 18:50:16

• 真不错。好好鼓励。 -Francine- ♀ (0 bytes) () 10/03/2018 postreply 19:23:49

• 谢谢，不知道怎么鼓励，老公说我太惯着她了，我基本按美国方式养她，大撒把，不学习，每天只干 -tax2- ♀ (71 bytes) () 10/03/2018 postreply 19:55:42

• 学习习惯工作习惯还是需要从小培养。 -Francine- ♀ (0 bytes) () 10/03/2018 postreply 20:25:34

• 英文完蛋的我问，“我觉得太阳不能怎么的我from柳树底下”，听起来象太阳在柳树底下？ -古代的事物- ♂ (0 bytes) () 10/03/2018 postreply 18:46:56

• 对话的标点胡浩 -古代的事物- ♂ (62 bytes) () 10/03/2018 postreply 18:51:06

• 很好啊， 这是多大的孩子写的? -阳光玉兔- ♀ (285 bytes) () 10/03/2018 postreply 18:41:32

• 谢谢，老师让家长挑错 -tax2- ♀ (0 bytes) () 10/03/2018 postreply 18:43:12

• 赞有底气的一塌糊涂。。。 -古代的事物- ♂ (0 bytes) () 10/03/2018 postreply 18:44:55

• 有什么底气？我语法很差，当年考试语法最差的 -tax2- ♀ (0 bytes) () 10/03/2018 postreply 18:46:09

• 这个底气怎么讲? 文豪给指点一下呗 -阳光玉兔- ♀ (0 bytes) () 10/03/2018 postreply 18:49:14

• 嘿嘿嘿嘿。。。 -古代的事物- ♂ (0 bytes) () 10/03/2018 postreply 18:53:09

• 直接告诉老师，你是ESL， 不想误导孩子。愿意以其他方式参与，合作。 -笑薇.- ♀ (0 bytes) () 10/03/2018 postreply 18:51:12

• 谢谢，不敢说，她应该知道我的水平…… -tax2- ♀ (0 bytes) () 10/03/2018 postreply 18:53:59

• 你到底是什么水平呀？ 不知道让网民给你看语法错误是个啥水平。 -笑薇.- ♀ (0 bytes) () 10/03/2018 postreply 19:08:44

• 高手在民间，我就是四级水平 -tax2- ♀ (0 bytes) () 10/03/2018 postreply 19:20:21

• 这就没有底气了嘛。。。不行，一定不行 -古代的事物- ♂ (59 bytes) () 10/03/2018 postreply 18:55:45

• 谢谢你 -tax2- ♀ (0 bytes) () 10/03/2018 postreply 18:51:43

• 这咋有股清个里西的味道。我孩子好像不这样写，更喜欢压个韵啥的。 -燕子飞回来_88- ♀ (0 bytes) () 10/03/2018 postreply 20:36:31