【E诗配画】In order to meet you FlowersMusic 视频by前川

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视频: Music Flowers 制作:前川

 

【In order to meet you】

Author:妖妖灵
采纳虫虫的建议之后,又改了改:


With the gentle breeze, under the white clouds, 

In the spring the seed eventually sprouts

Going through the darkest time, 

Flying with all flowers in their prime

 

Like butterflies that flutter the wings

Like a fully-fledged bird that happily sings

Just in order to meet you today

Just in order to greet you today

 

欢迎建议和补充:)

 

 

虫虫修改后的版本:

【In order to meet you】

With the gentle breeze, under the white clouds, 

In the spring the seed eventually sprouts

Going through the darkest time, 

Flying with all petals in the prime

 

Like butterflies flutter the wings

Like fully-fledged birds happily sing 

Just in order to meet you today

Just in order to greet you today

 

虫虫修改版本的细节见下:

妖妖的想象力真棒!好诗, 赞

 
来源:  于 2022-10-20 14:39:19  [] [博客] [旧帖] [给我悄悄话] 本文已被阅读: 5 次 (2598 bytes) 

Just a few suggestions for your reference. They might not be correct :)

With the gentle breeze, (under) the white clouds,  (or "With the gentle breeze and the white clouds". You need to have a word to connect breeze and clouds, otherwise, it doesn't make sense)

In the spring the seed eventually sprouts

Going through the darkest time, 

Flying with all of (the) petals in the prime (or “Flying with all petals in the prime")

 

Like butterflies flattering (flutter) the wings (in the next verse, you use "sing", not "singing", so maybe you should use "flutter" here to keep consistent)

Like fully-fledged birds happily sing 

Just in order to meet you today

Just in order to greet you today