You can't tell the person what to do. Try this one:

来源: 废话多多 于 2014-07-31 13:46:39 [] [博客] [旧帖] [给我悄悄话] 阅读数 : (821 bytes)
回答: simplified: 由 问讯 于 2014-07-31 13:22:46

Dear Mr./Ms. Last Name:

It was a pleasure to talk to you today about the 1234 position at the ABCD company. The job seems to be a perfect match for my abilities and interests.

In additiong to my technical skills,  I will bring to the position strong communication skills...(三个优点）

I appreciate the time you took to interview me. I am looking forward to meeting you in person and hope to hear from you soon.

Again, thank you very much for your time and for your consideration.

Sincerely Yours,

Your Name
Email Address
Address
Phone Number

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• Thanks, this is much better, but I sent the simplified version a -问讯- ♀ 给 问讯 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 07/31/2014 postreply 14:13:50

• 不好意思的说一句，你的version用词太硬了，我若收到这样的email不会喜欢。 -arcsigh- ♀ 给 arcsigh 发送悄悄话 (48 bytes) () 07/31/2014 postreply 19:12:18

• 没办法，已经寄出去了，听天由命吧。 -问讯- ♀ 给 问讯 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 07/31/2014 postreply 19:14:52

• 看来真是不写还好些。。。 -问讯- ♀ 给 问讯 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 07/31/2014 postreply 19:18:48

• 呵呵，没事啦。对方理解的。你真付合他们的标准他们也不会因为一封email而改变主意。 -arcsigh- ♀ 给 arcsigh 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 07/31/2014 postreply 19:25:40

• 好吧，谢谢。 -问讯- ♀ 给 问讯 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 07/31/2014 postreply 19:32:59

• 而且不应该用chance而应用opportunity 一词。 -arcsigh- ♀ 给 arcsigh 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 07/31/2014 postreply 19:16:47

• 对，太不专业了，噢！ -问讯- ♀ 给 问讯 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 07/31/2014 postreply 19:17:39

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