麻烦有没有英语好的前辈帮我看看我COVER LETTER 有没有语法问题

July 25, 2008

Dear Hiring Manager:

I am currently looking for an entry level IT position with IBM. I would appreciate your consideration as a candidate for any open positions.

I have gained the knowledge of Microsoft Word, Power Point, Simply Accounting, Excel and Microsoft Access from classroom. BLAH BLAH........

Please review the resume and consider my application. I would welcome the opportunity to meet and further discuss my qualifications with you. You may reach me via phone [phone]) or via email([e-mail]).

Thank you for your time and consideration.



Sincerely,



Hai Tao
140 ShangHai Road
New York
[e-mail]
705-606-9999

请大家帮我看看我这COVER LETTER 有没有啥语法错误

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• 语法问题在其次，你的这个cover letter不行的 -龙少爷- ♂ (88 bytes) () 07/25/2008 postreply 13:10:49

• 你就帮我看看这句话有没有语法问题吧: I would appreciate your consideration as a c -Vince_2009- ♂ (272 bytes) () 07/25/2008 postreply 13:16:38

• I might say like: -秋香- ♀ (0 bytes) () 07/25/2008 postreply 15:17:24

• faint!顺手点了回车键 sorry -秋香- ♀ (105 bytes) () 07/25/2008 postreply 15:19:49

• 回复：就只会最后说这句，其他不会说 -- 挺谦虚~~ -taizhou- ♂ (0 bytes) () 07/25/2008 postreply 15:29:03

• Cover letter should list your strengths and how to match -freshEE- ♂ (193 bytes) () 07/25/2008 postreply 13:41:37

• Not very attractive -二重天- ♀ (452 bytes) () 07/25/2008 postreply 13:54:49

• Re-write your cover letter -cqw- ♂ (236 bytes) () 07/25/2008 postreply 14:13:02

• 我英语不好，觉得你写得蛮好的。 瞎说几点小地方... -含娜- ♀ (366 bytes) () 07/25/2008 postreply 14:16:58

• 还有这个例句可以用： -含娜- ♀ (140 bytes) () 07/25/2008 postreply 14:28:06

• 还有我觉得这句好像不太对，但不知道怎么表达更好： -含娜- ♀ (76 bytes) () 07/25/2008 postreply 14:40:41

• 看看改成这样好不好点： -含娜- ♀ (61 bytes) () 07/25/2008 postreply 14:52:29

• 看来俺昨天写的没让你相中啊。。。其实照着抄，改俩字不就中了。 -美国老土- ♂ (728 bytes) () 07/25/2008 postreply 15:12:19

• 哈哈真你写滴？好正式不像你噢！ -秋香- ♀ (0 bytes) () 07/25/2008 postreply 15:22:05

• This is eactly the cover letter I used, always got good response -美国老土- ♂ (108 bytes) () 07/25/2008 postreply 15:29:21

• 我看过英国人那些，文绉绉的特别绕口，一看就不信的那种 -秋香- ♀ (0 bytes) () 07/25/2008 postreply 15:31:39

• 半瓶水来了：since 这是提高英语活动月， -含娜- ♀ (155 bytes) () 07/25/2008 postreply 16:17:59

• 老土英文实在差，要说精盐必含钠！ Thanks for the correction! -美国老土- ♂ (0 bytes) () 07/25/2008 postreply 16:26:14

• 可比豬坚强！可比豬坚强！可比豬坚强！ -眼冒金星- ♂ (0 bytes) () 07/25/2008 postreply 17:54:04

• 您这是回字的两种写法 -澳洲老土- ♂ (0 bytes) () 07/25/2008 postreply 16:40:15

• 怕被抱抱，躲在老土后面问一声，“可比朱坚强是啥意思？” -含娜- ♀ (0 bytes) () 07/25/2008 postreply 18:36:00

• 朱坚强是这意思 -美国老土- ♂ (121 bytes) () 07/25/2008 postreply 19:00:23

• 我知道朱坚强的意思，不知道他跟在美国老土后面那样叫是啥意思。 -含娜- ♀ (0 bytes) () 07/25/2008 postreply 19:30:19

• 上班时,写情书的坐在身边;下班后，躲在老土后面, -taizhou- ♂ (16 bytes) () 07/25/2008 postreply 19:20:26

• 不坐在身边，远着呢~~ -含娜- ♀ (0 bytes) () 07/25/2008 postreply 19:33:11

• 不坐在身边，坐腿上，远么？不远~~ -澳洲老土- ♂ (0 bytes) () 07/26/2008 postreply 04:10:09

• 俺都不敢说话，怕一张嘴，人家连咱们俩一起抱~~ -澳洲老土- ♂ (0 bytes) () 07/26/2008 postreply 00:03:17

• is cover letter necessary? i doubt. never used any -123581321- ♂ (0 bytes) () 07/25/2008 postreply 19:34:20

• 你需要改的,不是语法错误. -知名度比较高- ♀ (423 bytes) () 07/25/2008 postreply 20:04:33