College Essay 系列 (二十四):主题藤文My Channel

这是一篇2022年的爬藤文书。作者是一位就读公立磁校的亚裔男生。

先来读读文章:

《My Channel My Community》

Hours deep into battle with the legendary beast, a highly torqued berserker known as the Crankshaft Pulley Bolt, my arms plead for respite, but my holy spear Rhongomyniad, a polished steel breaker bar, refuses to penetrate the at-minimum 500 foot-pound tetanic aegis that is the scorched coating of rust on the bolt. Sprays of WD-40 seem only to temper the bolt, like the enchanted Sword of Gryffindor growing stronger with exposure to poison. I reach for my spell breaker, a DeWalt impact driver, set to max, I am a warrior, and I do not intend to hold back. Like Excalibur, I wrench the bolt from its threaded asylum.

Extracting my treasure, I turn to the camera and flash a toothy grin. “I'm Aiman, and I just showed you how to remove this stubborn crankshaft pulley bolt! Thanks for watching!" I am no King Arthur- rather, I am starring in a YouTube video, teaching viewers how to service their cars. In other videos, I would show them how to cultivate marvelous gardens, prepare ambrosial traditional Malaysian dishes, or construct formidable wooden edifices. I may not be a hero or legend, but each of my videos feels like an enthralling fable, a pan of a quest for learning that I have been journeying on since before I can remember.

I started my YouTube channel, E******n, when I was in third grade. My dad picked up on my knavish proclivity towards stealing his phone to film random videos of myself, so he helped set up a YouTube channel for me. My first few videos were blurry vlogs, origami tutorials, and Pokémon Trading Card Game guides, and I presented as clumsy, awkward, and aimless. Back then, my channel was just something to mess around with, but over the next few years, E******n became an integral part of my identity.

I cherish E******n as my community's Great Library of Alexandria. In vlogs, we preserve our cultural heritage, immortalize memories of our gatherings, campouts, and parties, and share our Malaysian traditions with others. I will always remember the video where my friends attempted to speak Malay, and we all tried to say, "Aww! Kucing telah mencakar saya!" which meant, “Oww! The cat just scratched me!" My sister and I will always remember the video where we sampled the Malaysian King of Fruits, durian, and had fun agonizing over its terrible taste, and I am grateful for the fact that no matter where my siblings or friends go in life, we can always find our roots through the videos we saved on E******n.

Our Malaysian community has always been there for my family. When my dad lost his job, my parents were stretched thinly, emotionally and financially, to support seven children. My siblings could not afford books for studying, could not attain Up-to-date technology, and could not pursue their passions for music or sports. We could barely afford food and clothing, and we would have lost the house without the generosity of family friends who donated clothes, money, and time to support us. I will never forget their kindness, and I owe it to my community to reciprocate that same kindness to others.

 

Through E******n, I want to share myself with others: I want to honor my stalwart community, show people my life Experiences, and make those experiences more accessible to others. Nowadays, I use the filmmaking skills I developed through E******n to create videos for the Yale Peabody Museum of Natural History to expose younger audiences to science topics ranging from geology to invertebrate paleontology, and in the future, I hope to continue bringing E******n with me wherever I go. I want to continue Helping, educating, and inspiring people, because while we may not be heroes of prophecy slaying Crankshaft Pulley Bolts left and right. everyone has fought their own battles, everyone has conquered their own beasts, and everyone has an important story to tell.

读了之后,您的第一印象是他都拿下了哪一家?以下学校他都申了:

Harvard,Stanford,Yale,Princeton,UPenn,Columbia,  Brown,  Dartmouth,  Cornell

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

再看看他的Stats和Ecs,您在评估一下录取预期?

看看谁能猜准.

Demographics: Malaysian American (Muslim), 1st Generation American.

Stats: UWGPA-4.23 (4.0), Valedictorian SAT-1580 ACT-36, 7 APs (5-5s and 2-4s).

ECs: Interpreter museum, class President, YouTuber, President math club, VP urban research club, Member science fair, Member debate club, Designer yearbook.

Awards: Yale Book Award, NMS semifinal, Raytheon Excellence Award, AP Scholar.




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你被那个 MIT 韩裔小哥抱怨啦! -run2022- 给 run2022 发送悄悄话 (232 bytes) () 11/30/2022 postreply 21:23:15

你认得的话,就替我报个欠撒 -贾平凸- 给 贾平凸 发送悄悄话 贾平凸 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 12/01/2022 postreply 08:43:34

第一印象文章一般般啊…… S? S最不容易预测。如果说他扫了的话一定不是因为作文。我的两分钱 -60MPH- 给 60MPH 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 11/30/2022 postreply 21:29:28

S难预测,在我们这里收的两次都是一般普通女娃,去年还行收了小中男 -bobpainting- 给 bobpainting 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 11/30/2022 postreply 21:57:44

S! -贾平凸- 给 贾平凸 发送悄悄话 贾平凸 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 12/01/2022 postreply 08:44:13

既然是first generation的话,应该横扫了吧。 -phoenix05- 给 phoenix05 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 11/30/2022 postreply 21:33:23

他说first generation American, 不是first generation college. -60MPH- 给 60MPH 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 11/30/2022 postreply 21:50:46

大藤3,近乎扫 -贾平凸- 给 贾平凸 发送悄悄话 贾平凸 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 12/01/2022 postreply 08:44:40

7娃家太少见了^_^ -小牛妈-- 给 小牛妈- 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 11/30/2022 postreply 21:52:00

您不能只看开头 -贾平凸- 给 贾平凸 发送悄悄话 贾平凸 的博客首页 (143 bytes) () 12/01/2022 postreply 08:46:06

对,我就扫了眼开头觉得后面应该也查不到哪儿去 -小牛妈-- 给 小牛妈- 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 12/01/2022 postreply 17:48:00

猜测哈佛,耶鲁,哥大 录取 -bobpainting- 给 bobpainting 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 11/30/2022 postreply 21:53:12

哥 拒了 -贾平凸- 给 贾平凸 发送悄悄话 贾平凸 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 12/01/2022 postreply 08:46:34

H, Yale? -smilingheart- 给 smilingheart 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 11/30/2022 postreply 22:10:00

您真是有眼力 -贾平凸- 给 贾平凸 发送悄悄话 贾平凸 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 12/01/2022 postreply 08:47:48

横扫了吧。。。 -水清沙白- 给 水清沙白 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 11/30/2022 postreply 22:17:52

这个stats应该是 -米汤- 给 米汤 发送悄悄话 米汤 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 11/30/2022 postreply 22:36:12

大藤近乎扫,小藤全军覆膜 -贾平凸- 给 贾平凸 发送悄悄话 贾平凸 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 12/01/2022 postreply 08:48:20

猜S,Y,D -晓曦- 给 晓曦 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 12/01/2022 postreply 04:20:00

D拒了 -贾平凸- 给 贾平凸 发送悄悄话 贾平凸 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 12/01/2022 postreply 08:48:40

前两段写的很好, 但是后面几段就一般了, 两个人写的? LOL -jingzhumama- 给 jingzhumama 发送悄悄话 jingzhumama 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 12/01/2022 postreply 05:46:12

前两段是大学文科生写的,后三段是家长写的 -avw- 给 avw 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 12/01/2022 postreply 06:56:08

这个essay就是BS。诉苦不要说没衣服穿。鄙视下这为人 -avw- 给 avw 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 12/01/2022 postreply 06:48:12

为啥鄙视。我觉得这孩子脑子好使 -贾平凸- 给 贾平凸 发送悄悄话 贾平凸 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 12/01/2022 postreply 08:49:36

结果揭晓:A-H/Y/S;WL-P/Penn;R-Columbia/Cornell/Brown/Dartmouth -贾平凸- 给 贾平凸 发送悄悄话 贾平凸 的博客首页 (276 bytes) () 12/01/2022 postreply 08:31:32

所以,HYS申请就是BS -avw- 给 avw 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 12/01/2022 postreply 08:36:48

各色人等都需要一些是现在招生的特点 -贾平凸- 给 贾平凸 发送悄悄话 贾平凸 的博客首页 (99 bytes) () 12/01/2022 postreply 08:42:20

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