熊二的申请essay

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学校后一半的学生,属于后进向上型的,希望博得AO一点同情,不知道录取中有没有起到帮助作用。 他英文一般,自己写的基本没找人修改。(其实我们没有push他学习)

essay prompt:The lessons we take from obstacles we encounter can be fundamental to later success. Recount a time when you faced a challenge, setback, or failure. How did it affect you, and what did you learn from the experience?

There is a certain phrase I encountered as I grew up, it goes “A is for Average, B is for Bad, C is for Catastrophic, and D is for Disowned”, a phrase used often to describe the intense pressure that many students face be it from family or friends. This is a phrase that I greatly despise. 

When I was younger, my mother and father would always compare me to my older brother and family friends. It was always, “Timmy’s mother told me her son got a 1570 on their SAT,” or “your brother when he was your age got all A’s, so why can’t you be more like him.”  I would also be scolded whenever I came home with anything other than perfection. I wasn’t safe from this pressure even at school. The schools in my area are sort of famous for rigorous standards and peer pressure for high GPA. 

At my school, there was constant discussion about test scores, each other’s SAT scores, and how many AP classes they’re taking. It was suffocating, and yet I still thought it was normal and even accepted it as a way of life. Every test, project, and homework was a matter of life or death, the difference between going to an Ivy League college and failing school, at least according to my parents. 

I remembered one time losing sleep days before a test due to the test determining whether or not I would get an A in that class. I would end up severely sleep deprived the day of the test and not do well, resulting in not getting that A. I remember planning which assignments I had to get an A on in order to maintain my grades. I also remember having to forgo many extra curricular activities in order to study and take private lessons. By the time I realized I was unnecessarily comparing myself to others and looking down on myself, I had already bought into the sick idea that grades determined one’s worth.

When I stopped needlessly chasing after the goals of others, it was as if a heavy weight had been lifted from my shoulders. I no longer compared myself to people I was not. Now that test scores and AP classes of others no longer mattered, the only person I needed to worry about was myself. 

I now have a much more balanced life, no longer chasing the shadows of my brother and friends and looking down on myself. Grades and test scores no longer mattered and I was more free than ever before. I developed many hobbies over these past few years in computers, programming, and 3D design. My grades have also improved in several classes due to less stress and more sleep. Paradoxically, worrying less about my worth has improved it drastically.

In the end, test scores and grades do not measure your worth and should not be the end all be all. What matters most is that you tried your best and put in your best effort. A is not for Average, B is not for Bad, C is not for Catastrophic, and D is not for Disowned, a grade is just a grade, it measures neither your future success nor your self worth. Comparing yourself to others does nothing but give pressure and self loathing. The only metric you can compete against is yourself.

刚看到一个哈佛学生的讨论这个话题

可惜我没有早点让娃看看,或许启发一点他写essay更好一点。

搞笑的

 

 

 

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看了孩子的心声俺感觉很压抑啊, 为啥我们的孩子压力如此之大, 是我们给他们的? -Rockeymountain- 给 Rockeymountain 发送悄悄话 Rockeymountain 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 16:13:45

来自对手和同伴的压力比家长给的大多了 -吹着吹着就牛了- 给 吹着吹着就牛了 发送悄悄话 吹着吹着就牛了 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 16:19:26

问题是小孩为什么如此care学业的比较? 学校里谈论最多的是标考AP成绩GPA啥的, 太畸形了。 -Rockeymountain- 给 Rockeymountain 发送悄悄话 Rockeymountain 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 16:21:46

加州歌喉学校的风气? -吹着吹着就牛了- 给 吹着吹着就牛了 发送悄悄话 吹着吹着就牛了 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 16:23:14

其实也没有啦 -wzg69- 给 wzg69 发送悄悄话 wzg69 的博客首页 (68 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 16:24:32

肯定现实就是这样啊, 稍微夸张点。 -Rockeymountain- 给 Rockeymountain 发送悄悄话 Rockeymountain 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 16:26:10

L是我们这里最歌喉的高中 -Croissant_22- 给 Croissant_22 发送悄悄话 (95 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 16:35:05

看来要经常宽慰孩子别在意分数,也不要太在意peers的影响。别人强就承认,自己还是要做自己就好了。。。 -两女宝妈- 给 两女宝妈 发送悄悄话 两女宝妈 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 17:17:36

你这虎爹是跑不了了,娃平时的压力太大 -吹着吹着就牛了- 给 吹着吹着就牛了 发送悄悄话 吹着吹着就牛了 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 16:17:00

其实他没有那麽大压力 -wzg69- 给 wzg69 发送悄悄话 wzg69 的博客首页 (82 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 16:20:01

, -randomness- 给 randomness 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 16:18:19

目前看申请结果还满意 -wzg69- 给 wzg69 发送悄悄话 wzg69 的博客首页 (38 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 16:21:06

你们学校所谓的落后生搁我们学校可能就是尖子生了。:D -Croissant_22- 给 Croissant_22 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 16:36:20

转折有点楞 -ZeroSumGame- 给 ZeroSumGame 发送悄悄话 (1094 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 16:21:26

他平时也不善于写作 -wzg69- 给 wzg69 发送悄悄话 wzg69 的博客首页 (38 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 16:22:40

我觉得写得真实。 -Rockeymountain- 给 Rockeymountain 发送悄悄话 Rockeymountain 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 16:24:53

应该找人edit一下,不少很基本的语法和拼写错误没有去掉。 -其乐无穷- 给 其乐无穷 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 16:21:46

原创啊:有没有发现同学这样担心分数的还不少,自己想通了还帮助了别人? -米汤- 给 米汤 发送悄悄话 米汤 的博客首页 (92 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 16:35:15

大学给的这篇文章的prompt 题目是什么? -ZeroSumGame- 给 ZeroSumGame 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 16:30:48

update了 -wzg69- 给 wzg69 发送悄悄话 wzg69 的博客首页 (20 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 16:36:01

加州国是够惨的,这么惨兮兮的 -tibuko- 给 tibuko 发送悄悄话 tibuko 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 16:34:20

分人还是。我朋友的女儿在加州读高中,我朋友从来不干预孩子的选课,那孩子喜欢机器人课,本来修一门就够了。那孩子因为喜欢 -两女宝妈- 给 两女宝妈 发送悄悄话 两女宝妈 的博客首页 (26 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 17:08:05

我觉得小中写这个topic有点cliché -Vbaby- 给 Vbaby 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 16:35:54

写这个是不会加分的,当然不以升学为目的的写写也可以梳理心情 -tibuko- 给 tibuko 发送悄悄话 tibuko 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 16:37:50

如果成绩单不出色,这篇文章还是真诚的,只是可以再多些正面的东西,写到认识转折之后就没有了 -米汤- 给 米汤 发送悄悄话 米汤 的博客首页 (74 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 16:41:48

从升学来讲,绝大文章是不会加分的,这类型的更不能加分了;当然能不扣分,也行 -tibuko- 给 tibuko 发送悄悄话 tibuko 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 16:43:04

我倒是觉得AO可能也需要在GPA低的学生里面挑学生 -wzg69- 给 wzg69 发送悄悄话 wzg69 的博客首页 (215 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 16:47:22

这篇可能打动人效果好。老大文章有没有同样效果不知道,贴上来比较一下 -米汤- 给 米汤 发送悄悄话 米汤 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 16:52:09

. -randomness- 给 randomness 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 16:57:06

AO很少没有看过的主题,但还是可以写啊。好比多少文学作品无非生死爱三味 -米汤- 给 米汤 发送悄悄话 米汤 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 17:00:00

AO跟CCP一样,要的是正能量,重点要在那上面 -tibuko- 给 tibuko 发送悄悄话 tibuko 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 17:04:29

谢谢分享! -twoboyss- 给 twoboyss 发送悄悄话 twoboyss 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 16:38:13

抱怨部分写得真实。但后面的转变比较突兀,深度不够。应该写一下具体什么事情让他想法改变。 -微笑的花- 给 微笑的花 发送悄悄话 微笑的花 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 16:44:09

看来父母给的压力很大啊,哈哈哈。后来为啥孩子不在意了?发生了什么事情吗? -两女宝妈- 给 两女宝妈 发送悄悄话 两女宝妈 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 17:04:24

其实啥也没发生 -wzg69- 给 wzg69 发送悄悄话 wzg69 的博客首页 (204 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 17:07:43

要是把父母的转变写上,有更大的积极意义,哈哈哈。顺便改变一下人们对华裔父母的看法:) -两女宝妈- 给 两女宝妈 发送悄悄话 两女宝妈 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 17:10:00

不过学到了,千万不能跟孩子提分数,要不孩子可能心理压力太大了。人生岂是分数能决定的:) -两女宝妈- 给 两女宝妈 发送悄悄话 两女宝妈 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 17:11:56

谢谢分享, 写的很真实。 -shawnma- 给 shawnma 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 17:07:51

感谢!从你的分享收获不少! -希希- 给 希希 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 17:26:32

感谢分享,你每次的分享都很实在,有用 -newca- 给 newca 发送悄悄话 newca 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 17:35:09

+1 -shawnma- 给 shawnma 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 17:57:14

牛娃啊 定了去那个学校了么 -MadisonDream- 给 MadisonDream 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 17:38:00

继续等 -wzg69- 给 wzg69 发送悄悄话 wzg69 的博客首页 (47 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 17:43:24

给娃看了。看完很欢乐。 -十月流金- 给 十月流金 发送悄悄话 (569 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 17:51:59

觉得很真实 -cloudriver- 给 cloudriver 发送悄悄话 cloudriver 的博客首页 (106 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 18:07:49

看完了后觉得这孩子特别实在特别可爱,肯定适合某些脚踏实地的学校。 -AlexisMom- 给 AlexisMom 发送悄悄话 AlexisMom 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 18:19:57

我以为是我老二写的。 -yzhl888- 给 yzhl888 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 18:28:44

刚看到一个哈弗的讨论这个话题 -wzg69- 给 wzg69 发送悄悄话 wzg69 的博客首页 (304 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 18:44:53

我家实心眼的熊孩子看完了就问我是她的朋友Timmy吗?:D -Croissant_22- 给 Croissant_22 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 19:03:05

湾区歌喉高中的写照,这样的孩子不止一个两个。。。。。 -加州阳光123- 给 加州阳光123 发送悄悄话 加州阳光123 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 03/13/2022 postreply 18:57:22

谢谢分享。都是真心话,这一点很重要。第四五段我会换成uplifting的。我走向社区看到更大的世界 -无言无语无声- 给 无言无语无声 发送悄悄话 (331 bytes) () 03/14/2022 postreply 12:55:02

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