小小孩学写作：模仿也许是关键一环

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发现了某娃小学一年级上学期的一篇说明文的草稿如下。我要是虎爸，肯定会说：平铺直叙的厉害。其实我想bso，bso点是当时娃去图书馆查了好几本书花了好几个小时收集了资料。当然咯，这个彰显当时我们电脑水平较差。

收集资料意味着娃肯定会记录书上怎么写的。让他自己写，多多少少有了一个模仿的底子。甚至娃原句照抄，在某一个阶段，对孩子也是有帮助的--至少他迅速能写出东西。这样就有机会练习写作的很多环节。你写不出来就练习不到对不对。比如说，改动叙事结构，比如说安排人物对话，甚至有余裕去描写描写风景，这些写作元素，如果一开始你“赖皮”，借用了别人的框架/情节/设定，你就有机会去练习。你自己绞尽脑汁设计情节/框架/设定，就未必有功夫有机会去操心这些写作元素。另一个角度来讲，这样的“赖皮”对娃的心理暗示也是好的：我是会写东西的。

说明文如此，故事也一样，很多娃最早在学校写的东西是看过的故事改头换面交上去的。很多小孩，家长觉得他写作不好，其实是因为孩子“死脑筋”，非得自己憋出一个自己的东西来。很多家长实际上期望的是：孩子有独立创作的能力，这个要求未免太高--惭愧地表示，我们孩子都十一年级了，独立创作的能力还差得远。当然我们低手要求低也是有的。

My name is XXX and my animal is the Gila Monster. I like this animal because it is venonmous and lizard-like. I also like monsters and a Gila monster is a monster that is rarely fatal.It can be banded or reticulated. Both types have bands around their tail. The reticulated Gila monster has more broken bands on his body than the banded one. It has a thick body, four stubby legs, 5 toes with sharp claws used for digging and a black face. It can be silver, blue, orange, hot pink, pink and yellow. It is very scaly. The Gila monster cannot run very fast. It has a forked black tongue. The Gila monster has a blue mouth. Its tail grows fater (sic) the more it eats. That is because when the Gila monster is eating, more fat goes into its tail. It can survive without food for months or even years.The Gila monster lives in the southwestern united states and northern mexico. It inhabits scrubland, succulent desert and oak woodland. The Gila monster does not eat a lot. In fact, the Gila only eats 5-7 times a year. When they do, they eat as much as 1/3 there body weight. It eats eggs, nestlings, small birds, mammals, frogs, lizards and carrion. Eggs are its favorite food.