you need an English teacher for this

来源: greenfieldcn 于 2012-12-30 10:28:30 [] [旧帖] [给我悄悄话] 阅读数 : (235 bytes)
回答: please take a look at this paragraph 由 windflower321 于 2012-12-30 10:20:52

The paragraph does not flow well. A lot of simple sentences with repetitive ideas. It will require a lot of editing.Asking your son to give to some friends he trusts to read through.His school's english teacher can help as well.

请您先登陆，再发跟帖！