I think 一夕倾心逢 is better.

Same meaning but better order. and 一夕倾心 is even better.
eg. 一夕倾心意终生
here 终生 is a little "mian bie jie", but the original 终守 doesn't mean death.

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• 倾心一夕逢不错，一字在中间，跟后一句的“一”对应。 -小唐- ♀ (0 bytes) () 04/06/2009 postreply 19:15:37

• 哈哈..同意..一野情总有其美好的角度. -流羽飞云- ♂ (0 bytes) () 04/07/2009 postreply 00:57:00