Command to my heart ---- 继续练习英文写作

本帖于 2014-11-07 19:33:53 时间, 由普通用户 阿童木牧 编辑



Command to my heart


Sailing in a stormy dark sea with my heart sitting aside
Giant waves crash and wind roars fiercely wide
Boat is shaking, dashing and spinning like taking a sky scream roller coaster ride

My heart, my heart , deep inside
Here is the command for you to decide
To forget, to delete and to erase with the graceful pride
Bring back the sweet night with clean breeze blowing gently outside

Master, Master, My dear master cried
I am afraid to tell that someone has been denied
Once upon a moon night with high tide
You have given up your ability to command with your heart being untied
...........

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一韵到底!赞阿童好诗! -胶老爷- 给 胶老爷 发送悄悄话 胶老爷 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 11/07/2014 postreply 05:35:30

Excellent work, see inside -逢缘随意- 给 逢缘随意 发送悄悄话 逢缘随意 的博客首页 (327 bytes) () 11/07/2014 postreply 06:50:53

also -逢缘随意- 给 逢缘随意 发送悄悄话 逢缘随意 的博客首页 (19 bytes) () 11/07/2014 postreply 07:15:20

拜读。。。 -沁文----古来客- 给 沁文----古来客 发送悄悄话 沁文----古来客 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 11/07/2014 postreply 07:20:39

真好!语法似稍有点小问题,“ sits” 似应为“sitting"或“set"(with 不能接一个完整的句子); “ roar -阿留- 给 阿留 发送悄悄话 阿留 的博客首页 (257 bytes) () 11/07/2014 postreply 11:43:17

这个练习做得好!! -wenxuecity18- 给 wenxuecity18 发送悄悄话 wenxuecity18 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 11/07/2014 postreply 11:54:59

多谢大家读诗, 多谢逢缘兄和阿留诗兄帮忙看语法, 忙着写句子和诗意,哈,忘了语法! 阿童继续练习! :)))都改了! -阿童木牧- 给 阿童木牧 发送悄悄话 阿童木牧 的博客首页 (0 bytes) () 11/07/2014 postreply 19:38:10

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