英语范文

孩子年底跟我回国，我给校长发Email要请几天假。校长说他跟管考勤的老师说话了，可以pardon and execuse几天。等我去到管考勤的老师办手续，她给我一张表让我填，如果这次旅行是有教育意义，可以不算孩子缺勤。我就写了下面的段落。我们这里学生工有英语专业的，我请他帮我润色，请看结果：

我的原创：
my daughter will take trip to Beijing, China. Besides visiting her grand mom, who is ill, she will also see National Museum of China, National Centre for the Performing Arts and many other museums and cultural centers. She will have a great personal experience with Chinese people, culture and history for 3 weeks. It will be a very educational trip

我们这里学生帮我改的：

my daughter will take a trip to Beijing, China. Besides visiting her grandmother, who is ill, she will also see the National Museum of China and the National Centre for the Performing Arts, in addition to many other museums and cultural centers. She will have an incredible personal experience that will educate her about and expand upon her own Chinese heritage through communicating with the people of China, experiencing their culture, and learning of their history for three weeks. This trip is sure to improve her language skills in addition to providing a unique, multi-cultural, education experience.

 

 

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• 英语不是这个学生的母语？ -20146- ♀ (0 bytes) () 11/19/2010 postreply 10:34:51

• 英语是这个学生的母语,不是我的，他要我保持原来文体。 -又当爹来又当妈- ♀ (46 bytes) () 11/19/2010 postreply 10:38:11

• 哦，谢谢 -20146- ♀ (0 bytes) () 11/19/2010 postreply 10:39:27

• 写地道英文和地痞英文都很容易，最难就是写在种 -又当爹来又当妈- ♀ (39 bytes) () 11/19/2010 postreply 10:54:53