【七律】久阴转晴(第二版)

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【七律】久阴转晴

 

城南城北万窗清,霁后苍天必有情。

雾散群山山已现,云凝多日日终明。

曾经雨雪阴幽困,复得时光波粒生。

每诵凉州词未尽,还邀春梦度沙城。

 

第二版:

 

 

城南城北万窗清,霁后苍天必有情。

雾散群山山已现,云凝多日日终明。

时光足迹辨犹湿,造化春芽觅已生。

每诵凉州词未尽,还邀春梦度沙城。

 

Sunshine After A Long Stretch of Gloomy Days

 

Thousands of windows in the city turned bright,

through them came joy and delight.

Even the mood of the sky has changed.

When the day is fair, the sky does care.

 

The fog has dispersed.

The mountains have reappeared.

Many days of dense clouds, endless rain.

Finally, the sun rises again.

 

If you have been through snow, through rain,

through sunflower's petals being torn,

you would know that waves and particles

of time's light will be reborn.

 

Every time I recite the poem that asserts

the spring wind won't ever come to deserts,

I don't believe that's what it really means.

There's gonna be new things in Sun's new beams.

 

I'll still invite spring dreams to my sandy city,

for one thing, one thing only: to make it pretty.

 

(© January 22, 2024, godog)

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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第三联弱。 -惜也- 给 惜也 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 01/22/2024 postreply 12:23:38

谢谢惜也老师点评,容我想想,看能不能换个更好的版本 -godog- 给 godog 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 01/22/2024 postreply 12:33:09

加上了修改后的第二版 -godog- 给 godog 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 01/22/2024 postreply 14:22:49

每诵凉州词未尽,还邀春梦度沙城。余味无穷,赞! -方外居士- 给 方外居士 发送悄悄话 (0 bytes) () 01/22/2024 postreply 12:57:04

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